Hey, I posted a topic in here a couple of days ago about CTR rates, and I was told to review the sales page (and a few other tips, but I don't want to go into details). Old (current) sales page: http://rsriches.com/ New (what I want to be, but need your thoughts on) sales page: http://rsriches.com/index2.html I just want to know what you think about my old page, for example: What is in the old sales page which should be in the new one What can be changed or added to the new sales page The good and bad of the new sales page Which sales page is better What's good about it You don't have to answer all, but I just want to get this right... Thanks, Charlie
Ok, first comment take out the google ads, google ads often shows Runescape guides for sale, which will distract your customers. Second tons of grammar and spelling errors, fix them. Last , but not least, this is Runescape, the players don't like to read much. So maybe cut down the content and summarize?
You would think most RuneScape players are like aged 12 MAX, I suppose conversions would be really bad regardless?
Yeah... ok this is really annoying, 1 place says I should make it longer, 1 place shorter. Oh, and quoting aged 12 max, there are tonnes of older players.
My feeling is you're making it too much like a traditional "how to get rich on the internet" sales page, when you need to make it more gamer-y - don't make it look like a sales page - put some game tips and some chatty stuff. and then hit with the sell.