I have been working on this bad boy for a while now. I am soon going to be submitting for Clickbank approval. Before I launch this I want to make it perfect. I would appreciate some detailed reviews of my sales page. Thanks in advance. Here's the page... http://www.30daywealth.com Thanks.
i like your page a lot. I like the video in particular. It feels real, compelling. If you are making that kind of cash I'm not sure you need advice here . The only thing I don't like about your page is that mass of imagery up top. Its like a big fat road block IMO. I might get rid of the 3 check mark images (they look like buttons). Would remove that swoopy thing that says "Finally..." and then start the page off, right underneath your headline "....30 days" with The Gurus....You might be able to keep the image of you (presumably) but you might need to slide it to the right some. Love this: "After discovering the system myself, I was stuck in a personal addiction for almost an entire week! I just could NOT stop checking my earnings. I was receiving payments between $30 to $100 every 15 minutes! And now it's even more! I was running back to the computer every 5 minutes just to see if my balance had gone up." Thats exactly what I would do and I bet most people can picture themselves doing that too. Best of luck...
Thank you, I very much appreciate your feedback. The fact that you read the whole thing means very much to me. I will work on the things you spoke of.... i personally like the imagery at the top because i believe it makes my site stand out compared to others in a way of professionalism.... but I guess we'll see.. as for the "If you are making that kind of cash I'm not sure you need advice here" you are correct in a way...but the truth is the methods I took to reach that success were unexpected to work as well as they did... now that i know what worked I want everything to be perfect as i release my system... It will be very successful and very easy to follow. Thanks
it is a very good looking sales page, and a compelling sales pitch. I personally find the MMO niche very annoying, lots of over stated promises, rehashed info, and huge refunds. good luck with it though, its def one of the more professional looking sites out there.
One of the best, if not the best, sales page I have seen coming from someone on DP! It pulled me in and made me want to buy!! lol You might want to edit out that "throat scratching" sound at the end of the video!! lol
Thank you everybody for the comments... I feel much more confident about the sales page now... @tsmooth.... Haha I am very surprised you knew what that is.. that's exactly what it was I was scratching my throat hhaha I guess if you noticed it then I should edit it out!... i was hoping nobody would notice.. Thanks for the good comments though
One thing I like to see is what I am getting at least as far as the videos goes. I know I might seem like the last person who should say this but trust me all my other video sites are like this, except for the keyword one in my sig below. I will be updating that soon with what I'm about to recommend to you. Anyway I like to see the videos I will be getting, in other words if the video course has 12 videos I like to see 12 video box images with a description for each one. You have 30 videos so that is a lot but you could show 12 video images with description and then says - 18 more included. Or you can just do this for all 30 of your videos. It will make the site look better to me and add meat to your site. Just a thought. Mike
lol... i guess that would make sense but actually, I haven't even submitted for clickbank approval yet... I will do this tomorrow, so the add to cart button doesn't even work... but yeah I wouldn't try that any way, maybe if it was an affiliate marketing guide I would
PLEASE learn proper HTML/CSS! The entire page is one solid image. I'm currently stealing WiFi from my neighbor's slow connection and it took me awhile just to load your page. background: url("yourbackgroundimage.jpg") repeat-y; Code (markup): That is your best friend. It will repeat the background vertically, so you don't have to use a single image. Not to mention if you make changes to the site's height, it won't screw anything up.
Love it! Now onto the details: Your happy pointing guy... hes got a bunch of white on his head... might wanna photoshop cut pictures of people out better use feather at about 3px (around that) to get rid of the trim... alternativly use him for dandruff products as well! As for the guy in genral take away the black glow and replace with a white one, lower the optimacy of the glow, that way you can phaze out the bad copy paste job... (or again use the feathering tool) On your video maybe redo it so you dont stutter and mess up your sentancing... write down what your going to say I always ask the same question when i see stuff like this... if i was making that much money why would i sell my secret? Maybe stick on "retiring guru"
"retiring guru" thats a good idea, I've never thought of that. I will also make the changes you said. Thanks