Which is a better title? - Pls help me pick.

Discussion in 'Copywriting' started by iworkforthem, Feb 14, 2009.

  1. TomoeMichieru

    TomoeMichieru Peon

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    #21
    I would avoid using the term 'blackhat' altogether. Even if people aren't familiar with what it means, they likely know enough about tropes in fiction to guess that you're talking about doing something under the bar, so to speak. This wouldd make them reluctant because they're worried about getting in trouble.
     
    TomoeMichieru, Feb 16, 2009 IP
  2. blazinrachel

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    #22
    I prefer the first one - concise yet complete! :D
     
    blazinrachel, Feb 18, 2009 IP
  3. tigerwolf

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    #23
    Consensus is #1 and I'd agree - with a few of the tweeks already suggested - BUT one of the key rules to grabbing attention is to make it personal to the reader. "I Made An Easy $897.57 in 48 Hours ... Could You?"
    Just keep it believable - and if possible give solid proof - otherwise you're gonna sound a bit like a scammer

    Good luck - please post the link for the 9 page ebook once you're done!
     
    tigerwolf, Feb 23, 2009 IP
  4. curiouswriter2

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    #24
    I am not sure what this is for however shorter titles captures a potential audience faster than a longer title. I would not use the word 'close' but the word 'almost' would be great. Also try to think of another way to say it and continue to formulate the idea to see if it is possible to make $1000 or a little over it. I think that would help to drive the interest more to generating that amount and give people to hope they can do it. Also instead of using "I" say "How to Make Almost $1000 in 48 Hours". How-to guides continue to be a hot target in the market. Good luck! :)
     
    curiouswriter2, Feb 23, 2009 IP
  5. hot8

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    #25
    First one sounds better for me. i would change 48 hr on two days.
     
    hot8, Feb 24, 2009 IP
  6. EasyCash

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    #26
    The second one is better - it is more 'ATTENTION GETTING'
     
    EasyCash, Feb 26, 2009 IP
  7. hypnosis

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    #27
    prefer number 1 too.
     
    hypnosis, Feb 27, 2009 IP
  8. aryan_cool

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    #28
    u shld go with d first option ;-)
     
    aryan_cool, Feb 27, 2009 IP
  9. NICKY Nitro

    NICKY Nitro Well-Known Member

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    #29
    Yes, the first headline is way better than the second one. However I would spice it a up a little bit and write something like:

    "How I earned close to $1,000 in 48 hours with a method that even a kid could use!"

    Something like this...

    You have to have the curiosity trigger in the headline!
     
    NICKY Nitro, Mar 4, 2009 IP
  10. GreenSmile

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    #30
    # 1 is okay , but i suggest you rephrase it and make it " I almost made $1000 within 48 Hours!"

    what do you think? free tip for you buddy:D
     
    GreenSmile, Mar 4, 2009 IP