Which is a better title? - Pls help me pick.

Discussion in 'Copywriting' started by iworkforthem, Feb 14, 2009.

  1. #1
    Which is a better title?

    1. How I made close to $1,000 in 48 hours!

    2. FREE 9 pg Ebook - Blackhat XXX Method to make $10,000 in a Month - GUARANTEED 100%

    Why?
     
    iworkforthem, Feb 14, 2009 IP
  2. Y.L. Prinzel

    Y.L. Prinzel Peon

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    #1 because it seems more doable, doesn't involve an impossible guarantee and sounds like it'll be a personal story.

    I would change 'close to' to almost or nearly....but I'm not a marketing guru.
     
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  3. Colbyt

    Colbyt Notable Member

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    Definately number 1 though I agree not to use the word close. Be specific. Any 3 digit number you can make in 48 hours will sound like big money to most readers.
     
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  4. Y.L. Prinzel

    Y.L. Prinzel Peon

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    That's a good point. So, how I made $899 in 48 hours is probably not going to have people saying, "Oh, if only he'd made $1,000. Then I would have bought the book." :)
     
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  5. dilemma

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    Agree with others. The #1 sounds realistic and not exaggerated.
     
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  6. surfaddict

    surfaddict Active Member

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    I choose no #1, not too hype and sound possible to proceed.
     
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  7. mspennylane

    mspennylane Active Member

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    I agree with the comments about the first being the better choice. However, if this eBook is free then surely the word 'free' in your title will entice people - maybe you could include that in a reworking of the first title?
     
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  8. jiosis

    jiosis Well-Known Member

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    #8
    Well said. I actually prefer "$899" over "$1000", cause $1000 is just too cliché in get rich fast e-books.
     
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  9. latoya

    latoya Active Member

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    What's the title for? A blog post? Forum post? Website? The answer as to which is best is going to vary based on the medium, but assuming it's the sales page of a website, I'm going to go with #1.

    However, iIt would be more impactful if you said "How I Made Over $XXX in XX" even if you have to increase the time limit. For example, "How I Made More Than $1,000 in 72 hours!" or even "How I Fooled the Search Engines and Made $1,000 in 72 hours!" There are so many of these make-a-quick-buck ebooks going around, your title needs to be compelling, even if your ebook is free.

    Obviously, you want to be careful when you use and suggest using blackhat techniques. You should make your readers aware of the risks and possible penalties if you want to establish yourself as someone credible and knowledgeable.
     
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  10. lightless

    lightless Notable Member

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    Mix the good parts of both titles. And you get something like

    Free ebook : How I made $875 [And a few cents] in 48 hours.
     
    lightless, Feb 14, 2009 IP
  11. iworkforthem

    iworkforthem Peon

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    Hm... I guess it helps to be humble.
     
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  12. Pixulated

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    #12
    What's the title for?

    1. diffinitely sounds more appropriate as it appeals to everyone whereas 2. only appeals to webmasters etc and the general public.
     
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  13. Ray Edwards

    Ray Edwards Member

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    #13
    >>1. How I made close to $1,000 in 48 hours!

    But this could be improved by saying a little more about the "I" and being
    more specific in the numbers and use PRESENT TENSE verb--"make". So,

    How a 19-Yr Old Blackhatter makes $987 in just 48 hours!

    -Ray Edwards
     
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    leelaprasad Active Member

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    #14
    The first one is good, as it sounds more interesting and appealing to the readers
     
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  15. geegel

    geegel Well-Known Member

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    How about?

    Here's the Challenge: Make 474 Dollars in 24 Hours. Here's How I Made It.

    Just a suggestion.

    Regards, George
     
    geegel, Feb 16, 2009 IP
  16. webgal

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    Ray is right about turning it around to the target market. The fact that the headline pretty much fits everything out there sort of points to it's generic qualities. You really could use it on anything which makes it less specific to the target market you want to reach. I know everyone wants to make big bucks fast but it's got to be believable.
     
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  17. iworkforthem

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    Hm... i think i need to follow more posts in this forum group. Interesting lot of people. :p
     
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  18. MarketLeverage

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    #18
    I would go with #1, using the K.I.S.S. rule. Keep it Simple! Shorter titles with impact are much better than longer titles with a hard to achieve objective.
     
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    #19
    definitely the #1, concise and grabs attention at first sight
     
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  20. Live2Write

    Live2Write Active Member

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    #20
    Short titles have a definite edge. And, your shorter version here catches attention of your prospect, but it doesn't clearly convince the prospect how its possible to make $$$ in so much of a time. It sounds like there is a lot of hardwork involved to make so much $$$$.

    You can create a short title with a little info added into it, say adding on what your eBook is about. I liked the way Ray Edwards put it. It is short, yet has some info about the eBook.
     
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