Whats wrong with this postcard?

This is what i have come up with so far. Now im stuck... Any improvments, additions that i need to make?

thanks

http://eldantel.com/retro-lines.jpg

 

Looks pretty nice to me.

 

thanks it took me 1hour to make, but i think its missing something...

 

"now you got something to be happy about" should be bright color.

I like it very much. can I use it.

 

thanks for the input. yh, you can use it.

 

Looks good, but feels a little too busy to me...

*edit* Also, is it supposed to read "Resellers Wanted"? Might want to spellcheck

 

I feel that the text next to 1,2 and 3 needs to be black so it can pop more and the title needs to be further away from the tag line. I dont think the yellow on orange is really working. If you make it black like I'm saying then you can ditch the strokes on the text.

 

It's missing an E in reseller.

But aside from that, the font for "Free incoming calls?" needs to be changed to something more readable and dominating..The steps should be secondary, but at first glance, i see them first.

hope that helps.

 

Agreed. Good luck with your design!

 

Also, it's hang up. hangup as one word is a thing, an event. The verb is "hang up".

 

You should use an image that makes clear what's your card about, like a phone.

 

In my opinion, it's lacking two things.

1. A clear indication of what the card is for. The buyer/user should immediately know what the card is about (e.g., a phone as r0bin mentioned)
2. Highlight or re-color the phone number that users should be dialing. They'll go over the instructions once and then simply scan the card for the number the next time they want to use it.

The rest is pretty good! I like the retro design; it's definitely making a comeback.

 

I found this design a little illusional and somewhat confusing..
I would recommend using more plain styles so that people can easily see information in the postcard. Especially you may want to tweak the fonts and the colours...
Viewer-friendliness is the key to improvement. Good luck.

 

thanks everyone for the comments! really appreciated! I'll post my revampment once I'm done! thanks once again!

 

A pic of a phone or someone using a phone might help explain what it is, a bit more

 

It looks nice.
I do not like the placement and the colors used for "Eldan Telecom" Logo.
good work,

-designer4u
www.realgroup.co.in