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This or That? Pick the better headline!

Discussion in 'Copywriting' started by Li Weng, Nov 18, 2008.

  1. #1
    "Discover How An 20-Year-Old Punk Made Over $15,000 In Five Days With This Easy To Use Hidden Technique!"

    OR

    "Learn The Push-Button Method Used By An 20-Year-Old High School Dropout To Make $15,000 Under A Week!"


    Which one would you click on?
     
    Li Weng, Nov 18, 2008 IP
  2. cd928

    cd928 Peon

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    #2
    The first one reads better. Although I would use Dropout instead of Punk. But that's just me. :)
     
    cd928, Nov 19, 2008 IP
  3. D-Dark

    D-Dark Member

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    #3
    the first one is more catchy on its title against the second..
     
    D-Dark, Nov 19, 2008 IP
  4. alexa_s

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    #4
    Just split-test them, and then you'll know objectively, in the only way that matters, which is "better". ;)
     
    alexa_s, Nov 19, 2008 IP
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  5. pinch-penny

    pinch-penny Active Member

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    #5
    I like the first one. I try to avoid sayings like "push-button", "auto-pilot", or even something simple like "hands-off". Though these phrases are very common, there is still the chance that a reader will not fully understand the meaning. I try to write in very simple, clear English - simple enough that someone with only a basic reading level would be able to understand.
     
    pinch-penny, Nov 19, 2008 IP
  6. tobiewun

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    #6
    agree with the first one
     
    tobiewun, Nov 19, 2008 IP
  7. Tom Alex

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    #7
    Jump on this chance to learn the hidden technique used by a 20-year-old college dropout to make more than $15,000 in five days.
     
    Tom Alex, Nov 19, 2008 IP
  8. Li Weng

    Li Weng Peon

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    #8
    apologies for grammatical error. It should be A 20-year old and not AN
     
    Li Weng, Nov 19, 2008 IP
  9. cd928

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    #9
    That'd work better, I agree. You can use Google Analytics for that. :)

     
    cd928, Nov 19, 2008 IP
  10. Benji888

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    #10
    first one is better
     
    Benji888, Nov 19, 2008 IP
  11. DomainCo.US

    DomainCo.US Well-Known Member

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    #11
    I'll also go for the first one...
     
    DomainCo.US, Nov 19, 2008 IP
  12. avonlee1983

    avonlee1983 Well-Known Member

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    #12
    I like the first one better as well.
     
    avonlee1983, Nov 19, 2008 IP
  13. Embob

    Embob Peon

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    #13
    The first one reads better but i agree you should replace punk with drop-out.
     
    Embob, Nov 20, 2008 IP
  14. lightless

    lightless Notable Member

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    #14
    Neither. They are too cliche. Try a better, more original approach.
     
    lightless, Nov 20, 2008 IP
  15. WebHostAdvisor

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    #15
    I preferred the first but I would test them both.
     
    WebHostAdvisor, Nov 20, 2008 IP
  16. latoya

    latoya Active Member

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    #16
    First one. Ditch "punk."
     
    latoya, Nov 20, 2008 IP
  17. brianAwilliams

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    #17
    "Get The Secret to How I Made Over $15,000 In Five Days!"

    I'm not sure the "high school drop" out approach is meaningful, but, as stated earlier, you should split test your headlines.
     
    brianAwilliams, Nov 22, 2008 IP
  18. sanjeewamad

    sanjeewamad Peon

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    #18
    First one is better..
     
    sanjeewamad, Nov 22, 2008 IP
  19. Jenna Appleseed

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    #19
    first one for me but I agree that you should remove or change the word punk, my first thought was it's a money making idea for punk rockers:D
     
    Jenna Appleseed, Nov 25, 2008 IP
  20. izwanmad

    izwanmad Banned

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    #20
    I prefer the first one..... but, can you make it shorter?
     
    izwanmad, Nov 28, 2008 IP