Tell me what you think about this new salesletter

Discussion in 'Websites' started by aymenbnr, Aug 2, 2010.

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    aymenbnr, Aug 2, 2010 IP
  2. DeniG

    DeniG Well-Known Member

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    Not to be harsh, but you should get rid of the video and the voice, it slows down the site, and the voice makes me want to take a nap!
     
    DeniG, Aug 2, 2010 IP
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    gyb.links Banned

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    Hot blog content,good design.
     
    gyb.links, Aug 2, 2010 IP
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    Nice blog :) I like it.
     
    art_, Aug 9, 2010 IP
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    Good content - but needs a total overhall
     
    chrisbeans, Aug 11, 2010 IP
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    I don't know what people are talking about. Maybe you have made a tons of changes since 2:09 am but this is one of the better landing pages that I have seen. Hope you get tons of sales!
     
    sidpoudyal, Aug 11, 2010 IP
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    See if you can reduced the height of the top graphic. Reason: your call to action statement is cut off on my 1024x768 monitor. Trim the gap above it too.

    The into to your 'call to action' is a graphic of text. ZERO value to the SE's as NONe of that text is indexed. Try to force important words to NOT break across lines (Tar-geted). I would reduce the sidebar width to furthur help getting your 'call to action' above the fold for all screen sizes.

    The 2nd paragraph 200$ is wrong for USDollars - should be $200. Consider rewriting it to reduce it from two lines to one.
    "$200+ daily income from blogs running on autopilot".

    The three sentences below "Dear Friend" should be indented slightly but not to the same degree as the following red arrowed bullet points.

    Add your contact info and business postal location to the page footer. A feedback form or email address should be offered.
     
    FullScale4Me, Aug 12, 2010 IP
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    You got some spacing issues you need to look at. Under Clickbank Commissions you need a space and you misspelled commission. Also you have some words in upper and lower case (PS: i have around) should be PS: I have. Also, only one blog,and yes i check - needs a space between blog, and I yes.

    And the dollar sign ($) in front of the price. You got lots of good info, you just need to make some minor tweaks.
     
    seant7871, Aug 12, 2010 IP