tear me a new a- hole

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    brianppc, Dec 20, 2007 IP
  2. JoseArmando

    JoseArmando Active Member

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    Change the graphic "Tattoo and you" because it is bad bad quality.

    Also, there are spelling errors in your site the most obvious in the title "tatto and you incredible.."

    Too short sales copy, your buyers want to know as much as it's possible about your product. Let them know what are they getting for their money. What kind of tattoos, what's their quality, how many of them etc..

    Also, please go to oswd.com and get a decent template, even if it's reeeeaalllyyy simple, just get one and test.

    The last picture of the girl with the tattoo on her back is low quality and throws a bad light on your site. Make it a bit smaller or get a higher quality pic.

    That's my 2c

    Hope you make your customers happy.
     
    JoseArmando, Dec 20, 2007 IP
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    chaos4u Peon

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    First off, here are some more errors with spelling...

    tattoandyou.com (your domain name itself)
    CORRECTION: tattooandyou.com It is still available for purchase!

    You can aquire this art today for less cost than those fake press on tattoos!
    CORRECTION: acquire

    Do You want to find out more and feel real happy about getting this incredible collection!!
    CORRECTION: you

    About 10 years ago i opened up a small tattoo shop after a small stint in jail.
    CORRECTION: ago, I

    I learned so much from the latin homeboys these guys actually made thier own ink while in jail and even made thier own needles fromn plastic forks, I wrote
    CORRECTION: Latin, their, their, from, . I

    Stewart lamay,CT
    CORRECTION: , CT

    if you want to join in to 6000 years of tattooing history please read further!
    CORRECTION: If

    Below Are Just A Few Of The Benefits You Could Be Experiencing When You Get Your Dream Tattoo tattoo and you!"
    CORRECTION: From Tattoo and You, add beginning quote or omit ending quote

    Thier walking cane can't take them away fast enough!
    CORRECTION: Their

    You will be seen more cool than peter fonda in easy rider!
    CORRECTION: Peter Fonda, Easy Rider

    I'm not sure if you are playing the role...but you need to make sure that you do not sound like you have a fifth grade education. Sorry if I am being rude. I just want to make sure that your sales page will convert better. Better conversion equals more money.

    Also...
    Photoshop yourself a new header image and lose the number on the right side of it, add more content, and center your page.

    I hope this helps a little. After making the corrections, post again or PM me.
     
    chaos4u, Dec 21, 2007 IP