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Squeeze Page - Please review! - Rep will be given. ;)

Discussion in 'Websites' started by yyyk9, Nov 17, 2007.

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    My site is here.

    I know it may seem to demean myself to ask for a review, but I'm interested in what goes through your mind when you read this page. Thank you!
    SEMrush
     
    yyyk9, Nov 17, 2007 IP
    SEMrush
  2. Fixxxer

    Fixxxer Peon

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    #2
    The "Make money sitting" background is a bit distracting. Perhaps fade it a little? It's also cut off on the right side.

    A little more content should be put in there to describe exactly what you are getting.

    Perhaps a single "Make Money Sitting" header centered on the page?
     
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  3. Lhlalyam

    Lhlalyam Well-Known Member

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    #3
    Hello yyyk9.

    I'll do my best at this review and share points that I think could be useful.

    My Thoughts

    Background
    I found your back ground could be done a bit better. Right now it has an image of some money and uses Word Art for the text. I'd recommend a custom back ground... that flows smoothly and doesn't take visitors away from the content of your site.

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    Title Target Wording
    I'd suggest that you re-word your title target text that is in red. At the end it reads '...And he's giving it to you Free!'.... I'd recommend that you change it to.... 'And you will be getting this for Free!' ... the first one doesn't flow in with the letter below it....


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    Letter Format
    I'd recommend touching up the letter a little more.... so that it flows better. Right now... its all over the place... with different font sizes... font types and so on...

    Email Form
    Ohhhhh... that was annoying.... I used a dummy email account with my domain... and the next page was filled with stuff.... that I just could bear to read... to much info on one page.... and not really categorized... I find people really appreciate categorization... makes it easy to read and it flows..


    [​IMG]


    Conclusion
    Over all... your site does what it needs... but it could use more work... especially since the market you are after is quite swamped with people giving out free information.... or selling eBooks...

    This review was done using IE6.02 on Windows XP SP2

    I hope this helps you.
    Respectfully,
    Lhlalyam
     
    Lhlalyam, Nov 17, 2007 IP
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  4. wisdomtool

    wisdomtool Moderator Staff

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    #4
    You may want to fill up the page more with customers' testimonials and such, this would be a better selling point
     
    wisdomtool, Nov 17, 2007 IP
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    Review:

    1.) I DON'T LIKE THE BACKGROUND
    2.) Compared to other similar sites, its neat and not bad. ;D
     
    conradmiguel, Nov 18, 2007 IP
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    #6
    Like said before, they background is too obtrusive, I suggest making it plan and adding the logo to your main content as header.
     
    janvv, Nov 18, 2007 IP
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    myDOMAINion Guest

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    #7
    I also thought the background is a bit too "loud"!
     
    myDOMAINion, Nov 18, 2007 IP
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    nishanthe Peon

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    #8
    The Domain name has lot potential, but I doubt this effort could be get a fraction of it. I don't like the color scheme, Obtrusive Background, and the way you presented it. But I think it still do the pupose. The message is clear and simple.
     
    nishanthe, Nov 18, 2007 IP
  9. Ponynugget

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    #9
    Yeah, I agree with everyone about the background being too obtrusive. I found it to be really distracting... it's a little hard to read and focus on your content when you have such a harsh background.

    The letter format is interesting but I don't think you'll attract many leads with your target market. You have to remember that the majority of webmasters have seen almost every landing page method and technique, so to get them to sign up you'll really just have to offer them hard facts about what you offer and not try to tempt them through persuasive language, big red headings and whatnot. It might work for other niches but it certainly doesn't with this one.

    All the best,
    Liam
     
    Ponynugget, Nov 18, 2007 IP
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  10. Mike Huntstinks

    Mike Huntstinks Peon

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    #10
    Dump the background, honestly it looks like you are trying too hard... Make it more informative and not sooo fly by nightish.
     
    Mike Huntstinks, Nov 18, 2007 IP
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    Yes, make a custom background. That would make your site look better. Good luck!
     
    crazycatsville, Nov 18, 2007 IP
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    The background made my eyes bleed, sorry...
     
    ennergi, Nov 19, 2007 IP
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    #13
    ya id only change up the background
     
    kenty19, Nov 21, 2007 IP
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    #14
    The background is a little distracting and I can tell it was made in MS Word. I think the sales letter needs to be longer!
     
    gary zaydman, Nov 21, 2007 IP
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    DonKon Well-Known Member

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    Not Found
    The requested URL /home/sss3dco/public_html/index.php was not found on this server.

    Additionally, a 404 Not Found error was encountered while trying to use an ErrorDocument to handle the request.

    :(
     
    DonKon, Nov 21, 2007 IP