Soccer ebook

http://www.BeLikeRonaldinho.com

Please tell me what you think of the sales letter.

Thanks

 

the page looks empty and just like other million of sales pages.
try to create some custom design to get rid of the sales page template look.

 

I agree. There are several free templates that you can use online at templatebox.com (and.. of course googling some more up).

If you do decide to keep this layout however, I would suggest making the background dark grey or black (so the visitors are focused on the middle content!)

 

I agree with 8everything.

 

I'm talking more about the sales letter, not the design.

Any tips?

 

I like how you told your own story in the letter (very engaging). The testimonials and the free trial. However, it didn't convince me because I'm not a soccer fan. Maybe start off with a short blurb/hook about how great soccer is and how it benefits you, etc (to convince the non-soccer fans).

 

Add some more images near the middle of the article

 

I agree also with Andrei.

 

i'm wonder if this ebook will make me run faster... sincerely, this things only improve in intensive training.

 

not neccessarily, if you don't know how to do it, how can u train for it?

 

spam page, this is how I call direct marketing pages. And as soon as I see their "famous' layout I close the browser. Sorry, but I have a huge aversion to this kind of stuff