Site for my Local Business - Suggestions/comments?

Discussion in 'Websites' started by lordweiner, Nov 27, 2011.

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    www.EnglishLessonsLondon.com


    It's my site for my business teaching english lessons. What do you guys think of the sales pitch?
    Do you think it needs more pictures/videos/testimonials? Anything else I should add or take out, thanks.

    Murphy
     
    lordweiner, Nov 27, 2011 IP
  2. 1cheapwebsite

    1cheapwebsite Peon

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    the bad then the good...
    Your first line made me cry:
    "Learning good English improve your chances of getting a job, making friends and getting on well in London."
    Grammar is a handy skill to learn and SO important for a language-based website.
    The odd spacing in between sentences looks wrong (not to mention my "this is a scraped and copied website" spider-sense was tingling as I read it ;)
    Make it more personal - you say on the front page "My Name is John" but then you have "Contact Us" - try "Contact Me" to engage the user.

    The good
    You included a picture - well DONE! (now put it on the front page ;) )
    Translation links on the right are great
    The message of the site is simple and clear
     
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    #3
    Your site is looking average.

    I think you can made your site using relative picture.

    I don't understand your site provide online tutorials or only sell only materials ?

    you put translation option at your site, I like it.
     
    jakesroy91, Nov 28, 2011 IP
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    #4
    the first impression about any sites comes from the design. In you case, the design is very average, just like a blog. Try to put some motivating banner for students that can influence them for more page view.

    Displaying testimonials is again another important point that you can follow.
     
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    you need some graffiti on the page its just to plain white
     
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  6. lordweiner

    lordweiner Peon

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    #6
    Thanks everyone.
    1cheapwebsite, I have made all the changes you mentioned, I think. (I'll go over the site with a fine tooth comb tomorrow to check for anymore 'odd spacing.') You're also probably right about putting my picture on the front page. I hate putting myself out there though and I'm hoping to hire some other teachers pretty soon, so I can just run the business. But seeing as thats not the case at the moment I should probably make it more personal, you're right about that. Thanks a lot and if you have anymore feedback hit me up with it.
     
    lordweiner, Nov 29, 2011 IP
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    You got a pretty good domain name at least. It looks okay.... I would definitely try to make it look more professional.
     
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