Hi guys, I just have a thing for asking questions all the time regarding a topic. Even, if I were a high authority in a field, I would still ask questions... With the many copywriting talents that differentiate throughout this forum, I would like to know, if anyone can offer suggestions to my salespage. It would be mostly appreciated. Thanks, and all the best -Ludovic Salespage ===> Private Label Rights
Your sales page looks terrific. Did you do it entirely yourself? Or did you use a pre-made template? Did you use Dreamweaver?
Its pretty good I think but I am no pro just see allot of them but it might be a bit long....aka repetative
i think it starts good, but towards the end the list you have on it, is way too long and too many words, if I was serious about your product, I need to see more quick fire bullet points and straight to the point information on the product or service you sre offering..What could happen on the sales letter is that people scan them which happens most of the time, because readers are always in a hury to find out quickly what you are offering and how much it is..do you understand?? Otherwise its good..
The point is... It's got to be easy for readers to scan through through your page quickly. Though long copy converts better. You must be able to drive their attention to the main points. I am hopeful. It's a great sales page. I dislike the yellow background in the headline. It may convert though it sounds irritating. Highlight it using an arrow graphic or something else.
Long copy is great...But your copy is long winded... Completely dances around the point..Too much fluff speak. I don't even know you...Why do I want to hear you make predictions about who I am? "You're going to be able to setup a website in just minutes and start profiting from it without too much technical know-how." Tighten your bullets up... Quickly and easily set up profit pulling websites that GET YOU MONEY...No experience required. Once your about 1/3 of the way down the page you get good....But the top is so bad I don't think most people will make it there.... Go through every paragraph and every line of your copy and ask...."WHO CARES" or "Why do I care" from the prospects perspective. If you cant answer that clearly then get rid of it...or give them a reason to care.
This is a good sales page but as the others have said, it is a bit long. So if you make your bullet points shorter and more punchy, it would improve the copy. One thing I noticed is that I cannot find your price easily. I am not talking about the $4.95 trial, I'm referring to the price after the trial period. Did you purposely obscure it? One thing many people do is read the headline, then if they already know what kind of product it is, they would scroll down to the end to look for the price. So if you do not make your full price easy to find, some visitors may just leave your site. I suggest you display your full price i.e. $4.95 for 14 days and then $______ every 30 days. And write some copy comparing this price with the actual price of all your bonuses if they are bought separately to show what a bargain it is to pay the price you are asking for.