Sales Copy in need of review, please

Discussion in 'Websites' started by Ghalt, Jan 3, 2008.

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    I sell a guide for a popular video game (World of Warcraft).

    I was directed to this forum as the correct place to get suggestions on my sales copy.

    http://wowgoldguide.getdigitalinfo.com

    I look forward to your comments.
     
    Ghalt, Jan 3, 2008 IP
  2. geegel

    geegel Well-Known Member

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    The first thing you should fix is the typo in the title: "as fast and as legally..."

    As for the copy itself, it does the job. Relatively short, to the point and convincing. Congrats there.

    What you should work on is the perception of the sales letter format. Your target demographic isn't particularly known for enjoying sales letters, so modifying the template and removing the "letter" references (basically making it look more like a conventional site) can work wonders on your conversion ratio.

    I hope this helps.

    Best regards, George
     
    geegel, Jan 3, 2008 IP