Hi Im looking for any suggestions for my site http://www.cashloopholes.co.uk Its not converting very well at all. Im not very good at righting sales pages so it might be an idea for me to pay someone to do a decent job. Any suggestions are greatly appreciated Thanks very much
1. Way too much red. Run Away my eyes hurt! 2. Why do you have everything centered? It looks messy. 3. At the very least add a border to your table or find a good free website template that looks professional. 4. Add some customer testimonials if you have them. -Jon
1 thing which would make it a little better imho if you were to add the background you have at the bottom to the rest of the page,or same background but play with the colours a little. Best of luck.
You really need to turn off centering. Everything except perhaps headings should be left justified. You also need to edit the text for grammar and spelling. I caught quite a few spelling mistakes. The whole prospect seems rather shifty and untrustworthy. Your testimonials seem fake, because they have the same grammar and spelling mistakes that the rest of the content has. Even though you say these will work in the USA, your domain name will likely deter most US buyers. Work on design, editing and credibility and you may have something. Good luck.
Thank you very much homeofficeblues, some great advice. Im currently looking for someone who can re-write my sales page if anybody has any recomendations.
I can rewrite it for you....there's samples of my writing on both my blog www.gossiprocks.com and the Chitika Faq. www.bluelaundry.com/chitika
Don't use underlining for anything but links. It looks like your page is covered in links and they are not clickable. Lose the centering. It is hard to read and your aren't writing poetry Get a dotcom. Americans like to see it. In fact I would make a whole second site dedicated to only the US market and a seperate one for the UK it will speak more directly at the American visitor instead of some "foreigner" telling them what to do. Take a look at http://marketingforsuccess.com to see an example of how to do this kind of page right. All the best, Jay
Thanks everyone for your comments and suggestions. I have tried to take everything into acount and i have changed some of my site. Could you please take another look and any more suggestions would be greatly appreciated. Thank you
I like the idea, but personally I don't want to read and read to find out what the site is offering. I think graphical options like flash to make points are better. People don't want to spend 10 mins reading a lot of stuff. Good Luck
Common misconceptions are abound of whether or not people will actually read the content of long scrolling pages. In fact, there are many examples where if the person is interested in the message and the message is sufficiently compelling, the right people will read the message. The some of them will act on this. Remember, we are not attempting to get all people to buy but those who want this product to buy it. This long page method has been tested and works. What makes it work though is compelling behavior oriented copywriting. This page definitely requires the touch of a professional copywriter. In addition to a copywriter it needs to be said that you should be offering multiple buy buttons throughout the page content so that the prospect doesn't have to work hard to find it. This can also be used in conjunction with a hidden form field to track which buy buttons are being clicked the most and on what page. Tracking this sort of information could help move the related message up further onto the page and get earlier responses. All the best, Jay
Okay, the site is STARTING to look a little better. Why did you still end the table short only to have everything below, "Still not convinced?" outside of the table? Then your table at the very bottom is a different color. It looks like you just pieced bits and pieces together and they do not quite mesh right. Here is an example of everything WITHIN the table to make it look like a complete site.... http://webmasterinvestments.com/ -Jon
Totaly changed the site so any more comments are greatly appreciated. Making more sales now so done something right.
Congrats! You now have a complete working sales page that doesn't look like little bits and pieces squished together. Suggestion: The text "PURE GOLD" needs to be a darker yellow. It is hard to read. It might help if you put QUOTES around the headline as such... "Discover how an ordinary guy stumbled upon some of the GREATEST LEGAL government and casino LOOPHOLES that ANYONE can take advantage of RIGHT NOW!" Good job. -Jon
I think it is too long a page, I get many mailers in junk mail, and i got tendency to delete them. I suggest give some clues on scheme, customer testimonials. Visit for Travel Experiences
Wow! You've come a long way. I agree with Jon that "Real Gold" should be a darker gold. I don't agree with the quotation marks. Quotation Marks should only be used when you are quoting someone. Did you get a dot com domain for the American audience? How is your site doing with customers outside of the UK? Cheers!