review of my new salespage

Discussion in 'Copywriting' started by buckknife1, May 3, 2010.

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    Hi, I just recently launched a new site. I'm just looking for some honest reviews of my sales copy on the sales page. Does anyone have any tips and ideas for a guy's first clickbank product? I want to get good conversions so any tips or criticisms would be very helpful on increasing conversions.

    All help would be greatly appreciated.
    Thanks.

    www[dot]powerforummarketing[dot]com
     
    buckknife1, May 3, 2010 IP
  2. Perry Rose

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    It looks like a same ol' cheap template seen 10,000 times before.

    That too is old, and seen, God knows how many times.

    Think how much better you would do if your page didn't look so cheap, and like all the others?

    Like this, for example:

    http://www.getclientsreport.com/

    Throw in a few, QUALITY pictures (not the cheap ones you have in there now), a few free tips to show you know what you are talking about, don't make your sales copy sound like a pitch from a cheap car salesman, and you will make more sales.
     
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    That header doesn't say anything to me. Start with the header! I did notice some good emotional triggers but that header just didn't pull me in.
     
    SEOSuper, May 10, 2010 IP
  4. iNET SEO

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    Honestly? Throw it away and start again. The internet is littered with these pages and if you want at least 1 chance for someone to take a blind bit of notice of what you are selling, you need to make it look professional.

    These long sales pages are recognised by people as spam, cheap rubbish, get rich quick schemes and promises that this is the last product or service that you will ever need.

    A sales page needs to have your USP's (unique selling points) high up. If you must have just one long page, have anchor links through to the various headers for each section and try to not have so many promises because these sound like all others that you see - and they all sound false.

    The page just sounds like you are trying too hard to convince someone to buy something and this will scare a lot of people away.

    Sorry if that sounds hard hitting but if you want to get it right, you need to do away with those style of pages.

    Andy
     
    iNET SEO, May 11, 2010 IP