Reveiw this ad

Discussion in 'Reviews' started by visman, Apr 29, 2011.

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  1. #1
    What can you say about this ad?

    No One Believed That
    Weight Loss is Easy
    Until I Got 1000+ Positive Emails
    in Just 1 Month After a Program Launch.
     
    visman, Apr 29, 2011 IP
  2. Vince （AdJoin.Me)

    Vince （AdJoin.Me) Peon

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    #2
    The slogan looks not so perfect and quite common.
     
    Vince （AdJoin.Me), May 1, 2011 IP
  3. nikhildave007

    nikhildave007 Peon

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    #3
    it's not good.
     
    nikhildave007, May 1, 2011 IP
  4. China_girl

    China_girl Well-Known Member

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    #4
    I think it should be more appealing and true to what a common man would believe. It also depends on what niche are you targeting ?
    Are you promoting weight loss program or some email marketing techniques ?
     
    China_girl, May 2, 2011 IP
  5. IPLAYFB

    IPLAYFB Banned

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    #5
    I do not think it's good idea about the emails.
    Just write true story.
     
    IPLAYFB, May 2, 2011 IP
  6. visman

    visman Well-Known Member

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    I promote weight loss program.
     
    visman, May 2, 2011 IP
  7. visman

    visman Well-Known Member

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    #7
    OK, here is another version. Does it have any mistakes?

    Burn Up 1750 Calories In a Day
    & Increase Your Fat Burning Hormones
    by up to 2,000 Percent at the Same Time
    - with Radically New Weight Loss Approach
     
    visman, May 2, 2011 IP
  8. mickapoo

    mickapoo Member

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    #8
    Too wordy, and a little all over the place. Make it more succinct and to the point.
     
    mickapoo, May 4, 2011 IP