Hello Everyone, I appreciate you letting me post at this forum, I do apologize off-hand if this is the wrong section of the forum to post this, if so, please move accordingly for me and sorry! I've been lurking in the shadows you could say for quite a while now and have been coming up with my own methods and researching niches, well I had the unfortunate luck of being bullied most of my school year's so I decided to write a book and considered it for sale..Now I got a website up and running and was wondering if I could get some feedback/criticism on my pitch, graphics, etc..from anyone that had the free time..I'm absolutely not asking you or anyone here to purchase this by any means or join any affiliate program for that matter. The website link is BullyEffect com .. Again if i'm going about this all wrong, I do apologize..Any feedback would be tremendously appreciated on my end..positive or negative! Have a good Thanksgiving, Nathaniel Thomas
Hi Nathaniel, Headline: Make it more along the lines of what the visitor is going to get. i.e.: "Is Your Child So Stressed That they Might Commit Suicide?" - "Will Bullying Kill Your Child" -harsh, but they catch your attention... -if you don't like those then do the "How to...{get a very specific benefit that the visitor actually wants}" format. -make your headline big. It needs to be easily read able right when the visitor lands on the page. I skimmed over the page and couldn't figure out... -are you helping parents with kids who are bullies? -or are you helping parents with kids who are being bullied? Body: you should have 5 bullets with specific benefits that your buyer will get if they buy your ebook. CTA: Maybe change your call to action at the bottom to something like... "Yes, I Need to Know How I Can Save My Child's Life!" Instead of: "Yes, I Just Have To Have This Great E-Book! Count Me In Right Now!" Just a few thoughts...
Jason, thanks sir for taking the time to write that up for me..I was going with both on that explaining both sides, I was friends with bullies and the victims so kind of knew their mentality and where their parents could have stepped in, I'm just seeing this topic all over the news and talk shows as late so figured I could write of past experience to hopefully help someone..Would you mind If I worked with those angles/suggestions you offered? and in return, if you'd want, link me a banner to any service you might have and i can put up on the affiliate part just for the extra traffic, I plan on resorting a lot of time to that so hopefully it could help you out as well. Thanks again.