Just launched, this new 30-page site http://www.arthritispainselfhelp.com/index.php has been constructed after lots of research on the DP forum. All comments/criticisms welcome.
Great job mate! It's rare to see an information-rich site like yours for review in this section. The layout is clean and professional while the meta tags are nicely done. Really, nothing bad to comment at all. Now, it's time to think of how to market the site and monetize from that valuable info you have. Good job! I like it
I am not sure if your main focus is SEO-style text or great writing, but let me offer you one suggestion. The following quote from your website contains two sentences. Sentence one is a train wreck and sentence two could be worded a little better. Revision idea: Arthritis drugs and pain relievers are the main choice for millions of arthritis suffers around the world—16 million in the USA, 8 million in the UK and 3 million in Australia. While many follow traditional medical treatments, others look to alternative medicine by using arthritis vitamins and herbs. If you want to keep your original sentence, then move the age up to where you mention the sufferers. As written, you are stating that the average age of sufferers in Australia is 45. It says nothing about the age of US and UK sufferers. One more correction. This sentence is redundant. You can remove “and that it is ‘only’ arthritis†because you said inconsequential. I have an idea what you might have been thinking here—sort of a comment after the statement. If so, you would want to do something like: “Arthritis pain is passed off by many as an inconsequential pain. After all, it’s only arthritis, right?†You would then start the next sentence by removing “but†and adding “However,â€. Good luck with your site.
Thanks for this excellent critical analysis marketjunction. Of course, I should have picked this up, since writing and editing is my main game. There's just so many factors in getting such a site together that it's easy to overlook the text. And really, the text is what will make or break the site. Thanks again for your comments.