Please Review this landing page

Discussion in 'ClickBank' started by ochiboy84, Sep 11, 2010.

  1. #1
    This is an affiliate page that i created for a niche software from clickbank.
    Whats you opinion? Market Niche Finder
     
    ochiboy84, Sep 11, 2010 IP
  2. paulmagno

    paulmagno Peon

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    Tons of typos and/or incorrectly used words/phrases...Too many to mention.

    As a writer, I also felt the pace to be sluggish. Send me a PM if you'd like me to lend you a hand with the writing.

    As for the sales pitch, I'll leave that to the experts.
     
    paulmagno, Sep 11, 2010 IP
  3. NCMedia

    NCMedia Well-Known Member

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    Agreed with the above, however isn't the worst lander in the world.

    * You shouldn't rate your own threads.

    * You should be careful w/showing your landers to people, it's asking for trouble (perhaps not in this particular instance but if the lander was really good).
     
    NCMedia, Sep 11, 2010 IP
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    kittyluver Notable Member

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    Check the typos and also grammar.Hire any one of the freelance writers to fix this issue. Otherwise,the landing page is really appealing.
     
    kittyluver, Sep 11, 2010 IP
  5. Le Dangles

    Le Dangles Member

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    Besides some of the typos in your site it is looking good so far! I think your header needs some work to it. Also the title at the top of your page could be a bit more flashy or stand out....


    Good work so far!
     
    Le Dangles, Sep 12, 2010 IP