Does it have any grammar mistakes? No One Believed That Weight Loss is Easy Until I Got 1000+ Positive Emails in Just 1 Month After a Program Launch.
Er - technically there aren't many mistakes - except some is/was confusion which is not horrendous. However the actual advert is bloody awful chap and will convert about as well as a dead priest
Weight Loss Is Fast And Easy. Come And See The Proof Now. 1000+ Happy Customers This Month. will convert about as well as a dead Rabbi
I agree, you'd be better off changing the ad so that it promises some results - you're saying weight loss is easy, but why not say "You can lose 10lb in X time", or "Get a flat tummy by summer!" - something more concrete that will really appeal to people.
They said it was a lie. They said weight loss programs are nothing but scams. Tell that to the over 1,000 {thank you notes|positive reviews} we {have} received – barely a month after we launched the program! Studies have shown that 'Lie' and 'Scam' captures a reader's attention only slightly less than 'STOP'. Will convert as well as a Mormon bishop on life-support.