Subject: [Name] registration, some of HeyImage.com features Dear [name], I would like to thank You for registered with our website. Each registered member is very important for us and we work hard, to deliver You best service. Here we prepared a couple of things, which You can do with our service. UPLOAD YOUR PHOTOS, IMAGES, GRAPHICS Have You had a great party, and made some awesome pictures? And want upload some pictures? Or maybe You want to upload some screenshots? Upload all Your photos, images, graphics to us. Each free account is allowed to upload up to 5000 images. Plenty of space, huh? CREATE IMAGE GALLERIES If You upload more than few hundred pictures You will find very usefull to use galleries. I usually create one gallery per event, where I take photos. SHARE YOUR PICTURES WITH FRIENDS Share your cool pictures with a friends. You can just enter friend emails, and we will email them. And we even have gmail, and others email contacts import feature. Using that feature You can email Your all selected friends in less than 2 minutes. SHARE PICTURES ON FORUMS With our service it's very easy to share Your images on forums. Here I uploaded some of Patsy Kensit pictures on the forum: http://forum.zodcaps.com/showthread.php?t=1510 Clich below, to start uploading Your photos: http://www.heyimage.com/users.php?act=login Your login name is: XXXX Vilius Aleksejunas CEO of HeyImage.com
There are some problems with the way it reads. Why are you capitalizing you? The first sentence says "I would like to thank you for registered with our website" it should read, "I would like to thank you for registering with our website. IMO, it reads like maybe English isn't your primary language.
Thanks for corrections. Changed you to lowercases, also changed first sentence. Yes english is not my native language.
No problem. There are a few other wording problems as well. If you would like, I will change them and pm you when finished. Do you want me to do that?
Hope you have changed the first sentence. There are few changes required Each registered member is very important for us and we work hard, to deliver You best service. Here we prepared a couple of things, which You can do with our service. – change it to Each registered member is very important to us and we work hard to deliver the best service for you. Here we have prepared a couple of things, which you can do with our service. SHARE YOUR PICTURES WITH FRIENDS Share your cool pictures with a friends. You can just enter friend emails, and we will email them. And we even have gmail, and others email contacts import feature. Using that feature You can email Your all selected friends in less than 2 minutes. - change it to Share your cool pictures with your friends. You can just enter your friends’ email ids and we will email them or you can even mail them using gmail and others email contacts import feature in less than 2 mins. Change capital Y to small y for ‘you’