Hey everyone, I thought I would give you guys the opportunity to review my sales page, and let me know what you think about it. The url is www . repairyourmarriage . net Thanks
It looks like you did a good job here. However, there are a few things that, in my opinion, need to be changed. Again, just MY opinion! It's meant to be constructive criticism. - I'm not a huge fan of the hammer and wrench in the header. Why? I don't know. I just don't think I'd want to see hammers and wrenches when I'm torn up about my marriage. I think that if you removed them your header would be pretty perfect. Everything else is pleasing to the eyes. - You say "I know you hurt." Sure, you can say this, but "I know you're hurt" may be more appropriate, in my opinion. -"It wasn't always like this though; was it?" I'm not a grammarian (far from it!), but I would put a comma between "though" and "was." -"Do remember the Joy"--missing a "you." -"but deep down inside; you knew" -- remove the semicolon Just read over the copy very carefully. I too was guilty of not proofing my copy well enough, but not doing so may throw your readers off and prevent a sale. Otherwise, I really like the copy! You're appealing to emotion, which is great. This should hook those desperate buyers pretty easily. Overall, I really like the page. Great job.
i agree on the hammer and wrench comment. overall, i think you used too many different font styles (colors, sizes, fonts, placement). Keeping it a bit more consistent will help with the flow and overall appearance. Also, i popped over to your affiliate page and your banner ads need some sort of call to action. Learn more, save it now, click here. Something... good luck!
At first, I didn't like the hammer and wrench either. Now I think it balances great. I'd add a matching footer (thin) and/or ad some flowers peppered on the red background. What about a needle and thread here and there? Great job indeed! John
Sorry about the first post... was just kidding... I like your sales page, If I were you here's what I would change/adjust. I think you should make the 2 rings on the top right of the page brighter. This way they will match the yellows in your page and they will look bright gold and remind you of how much the ring meant when it was first given as a promise of marriage. I also would change the color of the first headliner text (I will show you what you need....) to black or red. I would also capitalize the first letter of the main words. Other than that I will say that I like the way you chose the white background on the top of flowers. It goes well with the white area your text is on. I also like how your letter starts out. The first couple paragraphs are a good starter and good choices of words. This is just my opinion.