Hi, I've spent a lot of time putting together a sales page for a product. I've read lots of stuff and looked at what others say and do. This is my first full attempt at doing it all myself. Be gentle with me!!!! Http://www.intrepreuner.com Thanks Guys, Tim
The first thing that I would change would be the font size of the title and the second would be the image. I had to scroll down about 4 times before I could even figure out what you were selling. Also the copywriting needs some heavy rework. There is no sense of urgency and you fail to achieve that state of suspended disbelief. Try to follow this recipe: present problem, agitate, solve. It's as old as marketing, it's not necessarily the most effective, but you'll see better results. The domain name too is slightly misplaced. Nobody can really remember it. Good luck with your business. Regards, George
ya same with george, I had to scroll down about 4 times before I could even figure out what you were selling. make it simple..
You need to get straight to the point. It looks like most of the other advert pages you find on the web. A good advert needs to be simple and as short as possible. Just try it again but keep it shorter. (Maybe have some text on top of the imagery so the imagery is in the background)? I got bored after the first scroll down and I still don't know what it is your trying to sell..... sorry for being harsh but if you want to succeed expect honest criticism.
The image and the image-text below it has been blurred a little, rest is nice. Try to add some testimonials.
I think it looks good personally, But I havnt designed landing pages before so im just judging from other landing pages ive seen