this is something that i have been working on for a while and it will be on clickbank soon the site has been up for the first time today and i got 3 sales already playing with a couple things i plan to add audio and the words can be a little better i think let me know what you think www.businesscreditbible.net
Just had a quick read. Here's what jumps out at me: * Sort out the capitalization in your header. And throughout the sales copy. "Rocket Science" should not be capitalized.. "Cars" ? "Trucks" ? * Blimey.. this is short. You throw out this claim of $5m without any proof at all. I'd say you need to put in waay more copy about yourself (to build credibility, authority, believability), about what the book is and how it will benefit the customer, some proof of your abilities, case studies, copy to visualise what life will be like after the purchase (ie, they'll have tons of money), and so on. * NO SCAMS, PURCHASING OF OTHER PRODUCTS or SEMINARS - other products and seminars are the natural upsell for this sort of product. It could be you running the seminars and charging $1,000 a go. Don't lump them into the same box as scams! * Forget those Business Credit Building Companies that charge you by the month. - similarly, I see a fantastic opportunity for a continuity program here. Email coaching for example, at $200-300 per month? * Explain the guarantee. Explain why it's better than other people's, why it completely removes the risk, how long it lasts, what I need to do to get a refund, etc.. * Make more of your newsletter bonus. That's serious insider information that's worth a lot of money, yes? So say so. Build a bit of value. How much would you charge for the newsletter on it's own? Perhaps it's only been available to paying clients so far? Congrats on the sales so far (what was the conversion rate?). Perhaps I'm wrong and you don't need all that. Only split testing will show either way
WOW ok you are AWESOME i will take all of this into consideration i got sales through my blog www.mybusinesscreditblog.com they already know me so it doesnt count but i got a great review of the ebook already.... i will use all of this in fixing it all thanx a lot man you are awesome will appreciate anything else
I agree with TigerPub, you need more content about yourself, perhaps a image of yourself as well. You need to also establish a sense of urgency, why the potential customer should buy the product asap. Also expand your bonus to include some ebooks. Clickbank users love additional free ebooks and I'm sure you can track some down.
Hi, I believe that the sales letter should be much longer, at least 2 times the current length. You have got to convince the buyer more with testimonials and benefits to... THEM and why they should buy this business credit book! Good luck and congrats!
Yep definitely longer. That price is quite expensive as well and you do worry about using such a niche when you have to consider the current poor economic climate. Well written and nice design anyway.
on the price in this niche people spend money there is a program that has less information than my book and they charge $399 i plan to charge $89 as other books are around that price i personally dont like long pages but thats me u guys know better lol i will work on it i also created a page where buyers can review the ebook www.businesscreditbiblereview.com i got some awesome reviews on my blog so far so they will soon put their reviews on the review site once i fix a little glitch do you think this is a good idea? also? should i put a link to my blog?
Maybe your right about it being short and to the point. Good testimonials are usually clinical and you say you have some good ones, so just add them up.
i was also gonna put my phone number because my phone number is on my blog what u think? i sold 25 books in the past 3 days from my blog they are going like hot cake lol
I like the look of it and I hate those pages that are two miles long and take you all day to read. Most people skim over all the crap in the middle anyway
That's good news fella. You could put your best three testimonials to aid your sales pitch and then if you want to link back to your blog and also add your phone number then put that on. The more they know about you the better. I can't remember if you did this or not, but collecting email contacts (subscribe) is a good idea. Just offer them something free related to your product for doing so, if you havn't already. I notice that most publishers tend to do this these days.
ahh thanks i am planning to do that next its a growing stage for me when i told the readers on the blog i was writing an ebook they wanted it right away so i through it out there and now i am working on the websites and affiliate stuff and all that you guys at dp have been a huge help i was a member of one of those paid IM forums and i didnt get as much help as here