Please review my landing page

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    I hope for some suggestions.
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  2. terryd

    terryd Well-Known Member

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    Page took an age to load for some reason in both FF and IE.

    I can't read your headline because your black angel hides the text and your sub headline seems to be out of whack as it's over the black box in FF but under the black box in IE.

    Not too sure about the different sized fonts either but that's just personal taste I guess.
     
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  3. fzldemeny

    fzldemeny Peon

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    Thanks for your suggestions Terryed

    Shall I change my template? so it can reduce the loading time but the templates of Blogger.com are not prettier.
     
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    terryd Well-Known Member

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    I would wait for feedback from other members first, it could just be my internet connection running slow.
     
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    I'm in FF, the black angel does cover the headline.

    Remove the blogger navbar. You should be able to find how to do that via google.

    The huge block of text is very hard to read. People naturally skip over anything that is one solid block of text. Try breaking it up a bit.
     
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    you have to work alot to improve that.

    Just open FF and go to your site. Do you think , you will read that if you were a customer.

    Get in the shoes of the customer and make it easy on the eye. Everything on your page is so distracting. anybody who comes to this site will just go away in less than a second.
     
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    Don't use blogger.com...
     
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    by looking at your landing page, would you want to buy it or even go further into reading it?

    I also would like to know why Volknet told you not to use blogger . com?

    ANyway you should be excited about your page, look at other landing pages and see how you can improve it.
     
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    Hi thanks for your suggestions.

    I have improved my blog.
     
    fzldemeny, Aug 7, 2008 IP
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    i suggest you not to use blogger site to make landing page...
    you can create a simple one by using frontpage @ dreamweaver..
     
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  12. fzldemeny

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    Hi
    why not to use blogger site?
     
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    The graphics and formating looks pretty good, but the problem is the actual layout of the page...It shouldn't be on the right side.

    Center it or put it on the left.
     
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    its starting to look pretty good for a first try. It looks too much to the left to me, I'd centre it.

    Also I'd change the heading to a different color, and all your links to blue. People just click on blue links more.
     
    jaiburn, Aug 8, 2008 IP