Please review my english grammar

Discussion in 'Reviews' started by dFizzy, Jun 23, 2013.

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    Hi all.... english is not my primary language.... I have a blog gadget niche with english language because my target visitor is UK, US, CA....

    So please review my grammar on my gadget blog http://lastnightsbbcnews.blogspot.com/ thanks
     
    dFizzy, Jun 23, 2013 IP
  2. sarahk

    sarahk iTamer Staff

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    It was looking good until I got to

    Looks spun rather than badly written.
     
    sarahk, Jun 25, 2013 IP
  3. dFizzy

    dFizzy Member

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    How about http://etc-technology.blogspot.com , I bought the article from content writter... Thank you..
     
    dFizzy, Jun 26, 2013 IP
  4. sarahk

    sarahk iTamer Staff

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    Ok, you need to hire an editor/proofreader for your sites. If you paid for an article that started with
    then you need to put something in place before you publish articles. You're in Indonesia, right? You could probably even just hang around your local backpackers and trade proofing for tour guiding if you have time but not money for these things. I would have jumped at that when I was younger and travelling.
     
    sarahk, Jun 26, 2013 IP
  5. dFizzy

    dFizzy Member

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    The last 2 post with image is author by me... Iam use google translate, indonesian to english... All post except the last 2 post is buy from content writer... What about the article from content writer..???
    Sory iam not fluently in english... ^_^
     
    dFizzy, Jun 26, 2013 IP
  6. sarahk

    sarahk iTamer Staff

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    That's pretty bad. http://etc-technology.blogspot.co.nz/2013/06/an-internal-error-on-germany-paypal.html

    give the many millions of people in Indonesian why don't you create a top class blog in your language. You might be surprised by how popular/profitable it could be.
     
    sarahk, Jun 26, 2013 IP
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    syda Well-Known Member

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    #7
    Some posts are ok to read, especially if they were more like a blog style reading. But the grammar definitely won't do for news kind of articles.
     
    syda, Jun 29, 2013 IP
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    #8
    A week ago even though Microsoft fearlessly made an U-turn on its questionable information rights administration guidelines, ...

    Should be

    A week ago, even though Microsoft fearlessly made a U-turn on its questionable information rights administration guidelines, ...

    There are probably other grammatical errors but those were the first I spotted. Incidentally, "English" should always be capitalized.
     
    abajan, Jun 30, 2013 IP
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    Not only grammer, english language very difficult for me the original indonesian..
     
    Muhammad mafazine, Jul 1, 2013 IP
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    #10
    Read your Xbox one article and found a few errors:



    Should be 'a' not an.



    It would better to just say "Economist and pricing specialist Rafi Mohammed said" - Though thats my opinion

    It may even be better to use a synonym of 'said' e.g. Rafi Mohammed stated. Use a thesaurus for some, it prevents you from constantly reusing words.


    Should be on-line or even just online.

    Those are just a few. Many words just have silly spelling mistakes, like saying "god" rather than "good".

    However I am quite impressed, your english is really good and most of your grammar is correct. You just need to proof read your stuff before you upload it onto the blog, because it is really easy to misspell something without realising.
     
    TragicEvent, Jul 1, 2013 IP
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    Incidentally, if you're wondering why "a" and not "an" should be used before "U-turn", even though it starts with a vowel, here's the explanation. Also, I'm pretty sure that "U-turn" should not be capitalized.

    EDIT: Sorry, the link vanished. Anyway, search for "a vs an" on Google and click the "Grammar Girl" link. In short, it's how the word is pronounced that matters and not whether it starts with a consonant or vowel, as many people think.
     
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    I would rate your English writing skills as "acceptable". But how do you plan on monetizing your blog? That's an even bigger question.
     
    gregdavidson, Jul 11, 2013 IP
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    I agree. When you say "Please put AN h.t.t.p:// before the w.w.w..." you use AN not A although H is a consonant... because of the eych sound :)

    Good point Abajan!
     
    therealargo, Jul 23, 2013 IP
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    I also often wonder about this. :confused:
     
    YesThatsMe, Jul 30, 2013 IP
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    Your blog many times not opened. So, please check services and also add more articles.
     
    lilypitter, Aug 3, 2013 IP
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    Stop buying blog articles. Spun articles don't help anyone and clog the web with garbage. Either pay for a real person to sit and write content for you, write it yourself, or have someone else build your website. Invest to prosper in this business.
     
    GMWD, Aug 6, 2013 IP