please review my CPA website

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    yesfreemoney, Sep 18, 2009 IP
  2. jayw1988

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    The copy isn't very good if you ask me, I'm guessing you didn't read it properly. I think you should try something like this...

    "12 Year Old Banks $100/Day
    With FREE System!..."

    And now YOU Can To...

    Click Here To Download NOW!

    product image.

    Then go into some crap about how you gave this ebook to your 12 year old brother and how he banked $100/day with it. And well done very creative idea with the gateway you just need to work on the copy.

    -Jay.
     
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    As jayw1988 said the copy does need some work, You probably should also try and have a few varied length testimonials and several call to action ( Download now button) placed throughout the page. But its definitely a good idea, good luck
     
    0wned, Sep 18, 2009 IP
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    thanks for your comment, yes u r right, i may need to change the campaign name to another attractive one.
     
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    thanks,

    yes i will add now several ( download ) button.
     
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    I see what you've done with the download button and although its ok, a simple "Click Here To Download NOW!" link but not to big, would be better. And also where it says "I have been making REAL money with that method" you should say "this method has been making me money". And the reason is that phrase imply's that the method is doing the work and not you, if you get what I'm saying.
     
    jayw1988, Sep 18, 2009 IP