Please Critique My Squeeze Page

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  1. vito

    vito Peon

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    Your site is a bit accosting in terms of color. The green you use is quite glaring on initial page load. Can be a bit of a turn off for some visitors.

    Your site appears to be one of that follow the Corey Rundl types of micro-sites - one main page that holds all content. If so, what you are missing is the LARGE BOLD TEXT in an opening statement. When landing on the site, you need to have a bold and aggressive sales pitch in your opeing text that draws the visitor in to read more. Something like

    "Discover the 10 BIGGEST Mistakes of a Web2.0 marketer"

    or

    "Build Web2.0 web sites effortlessly with our proven system"

    or something like that. The point is that when landing on your site, unless the visitor takes the time to read all the text, there is no compelling headline in BOLD print to entice the visitor.

    Vito
     
    vito, Nov 16, 2006 IP
  2. peeg

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    #22
    hi Vito, I actually did have a bold Red Headline, yet was told it was too "In your Face." I think I will actually put it back in a less glaring fashion now though, Thanks for the input!

    Anyone else have any thoughts?
     
    peeg, Nov 16, 2006 IP