Please Critique my sales copy

Discussion in 'Copywriting' started by jukebox9988, Nov 12, 2007.

  1. #1
    Hey guys,

    I'm looking for more feedback on my sales copy for a product I'm promoting.

    It's missing the eBook cover (designer isn't finished yet), but everything else is in place.

    Sales Page

    Any suggestions or comments?

    Thanks!
     
    jukebox9988, Nov 12, 2007 IP
  2. ashvaj

    ashvaj Active Member

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    Having a close look at your sales page I find some relevant issues.
    1. Please reconsider the fonts selection. Particularly the "BOLD" ones.
    2. Rethink on the "Fonts Color" as well.
    3.I find no logic in asking the visitors to write three reasons first and then proceed further.They will not get any immediate answers to their questions. It may irritate them as well. Afterall , you need to judge that how long a visitor will stay on your sales page.
     
    ashvaj, Nov 15, 2007 IP
  3. Contentwriter_2707

    Contentwriter_2707 Banned

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    well as per my comments goes... your sales page is not looking very clean... i as a reader wont read it.. so please reconsider your font and try and use something very neat.. say like... Tahoma or Verdana..

    because of the font... the reader is not able to distinguish between the normal and bold forms and hence gets confused!!!

    asking about three questions in the beginning is a good idea... as that will keep the reader stay in the sales page till the last work until he gets the answer.. but then again.... the way you move on from the questions to provide the answers...

    "Of the 3 things above, how many would be solved if I taught you a proven method to start making money online as an affiliate marketer right now?" is not peppy enough to convince the reader to scroll down..

    the rest is all fine.. :)
     
    Contentwriter_2707, Nov 15, 2007 IP
  4. Coby DuBose

    Coby DuBose Peon

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    It hurt my eyes a little, to be honest. The general premise behind your site is fine, but the copy is tough to read.
     
    Coby DuBose, Nov 16, 2007 IP
  5. jukebox9988

    jukebox9988 Well-Known Member

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    What do you mean hurt your eyes?
     
    jukebox9988, Nov 17, 2007 IP
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    I too agree that the bold font should be changed, I would put the picture underneath the red font you have already laid out. I would also change the page to match with the design of the book more. Since its green/white I would make the layout more appropriately colored. On the plus side, the picture looks great and the image showing your profit helps to build trust in your product.
     
    Skunk, Nov 18, 2007 IP