Old Site - Better content - Completely Changed

Discussion in 'Websites' started by nut legend, May 1, 2009.

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    Hey,

    Please may you review; http://www.joshpotter.com. Can you also suggest a good description for my site - currently my one is rubbish 'Make money online'

    Regards,

    nut legend
     
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  2. spiritman

    spiritman Member

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    Josh,

    When I first started reading your blog and read "comparatively not habituated to this term" I thought you were someone whose english was not their native language and you were having a hard time with a thesaurus.

    But you are from England!

    My advice: be yourself. Write as you speak. Be conversational.

    Get rid of the flowery language, I bet you don't talk like that...

    Listen, you're 15. You can't come across as some hot shot guru or you just look like a 15 year old trying to come across like a hot shot guru:)

    "Ramblings of a 15 year old dot com entrepreneur" is a perfect title.

    Share your trials and tribulations, your failures and your successes...no matter how small.

    People will identify with you. They'll root for you! You'll get a following.

    Look at Justin at the blog at sitefling.com He's an overweight ex-drug addict.

    He's himself, warts and all. And people love him.

    Do the same.

    Keep trying and don't be afraid of showing yourself, weaknesses and all.

    And get rid of the damn game link.

    Put a link to an appropriate "on theme" aff product.

    All the best.

    Spiritman
     
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  3. nut legend

    nut legend Well-Known Member

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    Hey,

    Thanks for the advice - I didn't write that articles (however - that is no excuse) so I have changed the first sentence....

    I don't really want to be taken as a joke hence I use 'flowery' language - plus my family were/are strict in my upbringing.

    The link is an adsense - I was testing about clicks etc... However it isn't really on-topic so I will remove it....

    I may remove my age because like I said earlier people may think of me as a joke. One of my past clients thought I was 24ish until I told him my age....

    I will probably post about my past sites - later on, but I am planning of making a membership site (if its possible) but I don't think people would sign up as I'm fifteen - or would they, if I proved myself about my topic in question.

    Regards,

    nut legend
     
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  4. bluemouse2

    bluemouse2 Well-Known Member

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    I'm not sure if that green is the best color for your site. Beside this it looks fine.
     
    bluemouse2, May 2, 2009 IP