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Nothing at all on that page that would compel a person to buy. Lots of work to turn that one into a winner.
I thought the other posters were being harsh until I checked out the site. Now I think they were being fair. Two observations, both offered in the spirit of being constructive and helpful. First, your ad copy is not compelling. Most people are quite well aware that they spend more money by eating in restaurants than by cooking for themselves, and few people actually wait in line or spend hours in restaurant lobbies waiting to be seated. I just don't think that pitch is going to resonate with most people... but I think you could modify it to make appeal more to the emotions... "How Impressed Would Your Friends Be If You Invited Them for a Lavish Four-Course Gourmet Meal - And Then Cooked Everything Yourself?" The foregoing is hardly brilliant, but it does harken back to the classic "Everybody Laughed When I Sat Down at the Piano - Until I Started to Play." If you want to play up the money-saving angle, hit it harder: "Are You Throwing Away Hundreds of Dollars a Month Eating in Restaurants Because You Don't Know How to Cook?" Another thing that bugs me about your copy is that I get the feeling that your product is a nothing more than a cookbook, rather than a cooking course. I can pull 200+ recipes off the internet in less than ten minutes time, without spending a dime. Why would I want to spend money on yours, unless you're giving me something I need? (As an aside, describing your recipes as having "no room for error" indicates that they're difficult to follow - you'd be better off saying something like "We've made each recipe easy to follow, providing step-by-step instructions that are virtually foolproof!") If I'm not skilled at cooking, I want some assurance that I getting more than just a bunch of recipes. If you're offering a course, then give me a run-down of what you're going to teach me: "Our first module covers all the basics of cooking: equipment, terminology, measuring, and safety. With our second module we move into stovetop cooking: frying, sauteeing, boiling, and basting...." (Of course, I'm just making this up, but you get the idea.) Since, as a potential customer, I'm a simpleton who can't boil and egg, lay everything out for me in a bulleted list. While you're at it, tell me at least SOME of the recipes you're going to be giving me. Are we talking about Beef Wellington or Tater Tots? There's no way to tell. Now, give me some extras. I want BONUSES! Lots of them. If the main portion of your sales pitch hasn't got me drooling then offer me something more to seal the deal. Make me feel like I'd be an idiot NOT to buy. Okay, that was point one. Point two is that I've never seen a page so devoid of visual interest in my life. Where are the photos of the incredible dishes I'm going to learn to prepare? Where are the impressed diners, savoring every bite? Food is sensual - food is appealing to the eye. Haven't we all seen a great photo of a beautiful steak or a fabulous ice cream sundae and developed an instantaneous craving? Yet your page has - literally - NOTHING but text. There are tons of high-quality stock photos of food that you can acquire for next to nothing, but you haven't bothered with those. For that matter, there's no logo, no graphic design, no sense of sophistication. YOUR PRODUCT DOESN'T EVEN HAVE A NAME. In my opinion, that's just pitiful. Moreover, if your page had all those elements and did put me in a buying mood, I'd be unable to buy your product. There's no way to order, not even the suggestion of the price you're asking. Instead, I have to provide my e-mail address, and hope you'll get back to me sometime in the future? What if I have a big date TONIGHT and I want to impress her with a home-cooked meal? I'd be SOL. Finally, what is this? "Due to the overwhelming popularity of this product, I am going to have to limit the amount of copies I can give out. Please fill out the form below to check for available copies." That had my BS detector kicking like a mule. That statement, coupled with the underwhelming nature of the rest of your page, telegraphs precisely the wrong message. It tells me you're not being truthful (and whenever you're asking someone to spend their money on your product, being credible will make you or break you). There's simply no way that your sales copy could produce anything resembling "overwhelming appeal." If you're not up to the task, I would suggest hiring a professional copywriter to revise your page, and a designer to make it more appealing. Of course, all of this would be for naught if the product's no good, so make sure you're offering something of real value. As I said before, if it's just a collection of recipes, I don't think it's going to fly.
@Otto: Great tips there. @dorai: Your page needs much more work to get it to convert. Not just the page, but you need to improve the product also.
ATTENTION! "Due to the overwhelming popularity of this product, I am going to have to limit the amount of copies I can give out. Please fill out the form below to check for available copies." comon, this is funny!
Hi, Everybody thanks for your comments, I should have put more time and effort into this. I did this after office hours in the night and I am new at this, I just followed some guide and did this site. Well from the comments i see it's a complete failure I will try and improve the website @Otto Thanks for your tips, I will try to remember this going forward and I will check out more websites related to cooking. I am modifying the web page with some more content Thanks
Don't worry, I'm not going to shit all over everything you've done. Everyone has to start somewhere, and honestly, you learn more from failure than you do from success. Developing a unique writing style that people can related to is super important in sales. Don't listen to anyone that says you can slash and burn your way to victory. Creating a style of writing that is unique to your personality isn't an easy thing to do. That's especially if you're dyslexic like me, and I don't think my writing is that bad, is it? So don't give up. Also, don't waste your time doing speculative work! You're just going to wind up burning away precious motivation that'd be best invested on your product.
I agree...get out there and check out tons of sites selling what you want to sell. Look at their bonuses, check out how they squeeze for opt-ins. You should get a feel for what their sites look like. Go back and look at yours and ask yourself, "Does my site look appealing?" If the answer is no ( I suspect you have discovered that from all the comments), draw some ideas for the sites you have visited. Remember, become their customer and you will learn a lot. Good luck my friend!
The fact that you are already publishing your own product is impressive. But you need to pay for a design if you can't design yourself, simple as that.
Every great affiliates and info-product vendors were once disaster. They gotta learn somewhere right? To the OP, you're 90% ahead of a lot of people here. You created your own product even if it's not the best...and you also asked for feedbacks. Good work...and all the comments here is one of the reason I avoid this place.