New Campaign - Can Somebody Review My LP?

Discussion in 'ClickBank' started by nuruddeen710, Sep 19, 2008.

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    Hi, after few successful try i decide to start another campaign. This time I decide to try a niche about Anxiety/Panic Attacks. Here is my website:

    www.anxietybattle.com

    Can somebody review my LPs? What do you think about the design? What about the grammar and punctuation? The writing is my main concern because English is not my first language. Can somebody shed a light for me please :) Thanks!
     
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    bl4ckmaN^ Well-Known Member

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    Quite good.

    Probably you could add more testimonials on the left, because that side looks kinda empty compared to the right one.
     
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  3. getjimmy

    getjimmy Prominent Member

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    Nice one,but left side is black,do add some testimonials as blackman said or u can also add some banner.
     
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    nuruddeen710 Peon

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    Thanks bl4ckmaN^, getjimmy. I plan to put a navigation below the testimonials for articles. I hope by adding content my site will look less spammy and hopefully will beat google quality score.
     
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    Nice one and good comments. Alternatively, you could include an email collecting form on the left panel, ie in case you are interested in building a list.
     
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    I like the IDEAL!, Give you customer anxiety by showing him that LP, then sell him a solution.

    Makes me want to click GTFO button, and gives me anxiety.

    Just my 2 cents


    A lil more constructive, the 50/50 split is a little confusing, give the reader more direction, and make them follow along. plus a lil more testiomianls or something else to add more information to the left. By 50/50 split, i mean, either make it just 1 column or 2 columns but with 1 main column.

    Your Hooker could use a little work.

    I also don't care much for the light text on light backround, stick to white backround and black text, them move from there.

    Overall 2/10.

    Gl

    Vene
     
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    Thanks everybody for your comment. Anything else that i should consider?
     
    nuruddeen710, Sep 20, 2008 IP