New Bio from India

Discussion in 'Introductions' started by Hitesh Thakker, Jun 16, 2013.

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    I am Hitesh Thakkar owner of Vivahcards. I am from Ahmedabad, India. I am here to discover a huge collection of wedding invitations cards which i have made. Digitalpoint is the best place where we share our creativity and make a good friends. I have own website about wedding invitations, vivahcards.com
     
    Hitesh Thakker, Jun 16, 2013 IP
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    Spoiltdiva Acclaimed Member

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    Hello Hitesh, welcome to DP. I make extra income as a translator so I study linguistics. I realize that being from India English is probably not your first language, so allow me to help.
    "I am here to *discover* a huge collection of wedding cards that I have made". The word discover indicates gaining knowledge or finding something for the first time. It would have been better if you wrote something like "I am here to promote".......
    Also "I have *my* own website"....would have been more effective. Little things like this can go a long way in convincing your target market. Good luck with all.
     
    Spoiltdiva, Jun 17, 2013 IP
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    Hitesh Thakker Greenhorn

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    Thank you Spoiltdiva to make me correct. As you said that as English is not my first language that is the reason.

    Thank you again
     
    Hitesh Thakker, Dec 3, 2013 IP
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