Hello, I just made a new squeeze page and wanted some reviews. Would you sign up for it? Please try to give reasons for your view. http://www.betterfind.org/hydrogen-water-car/ Thanks
It looks cheap, and not believeable. The green and yellow makes the site God-awful ugly. Pea green, which is in your borders, is one of the most unpopular colors out there. On top of that, most of your visitors will not give you their e-mail address. Why do a method, like a squeeze page, when most of your visitors don't like and or will not use it? There's more, but I think you heard enough. ~
I have learned that Perry always seems to give negative responses. Don't let him disturb you too much
seems to be a highly critical DP member here. do you have any suggestions to make? Which color would you use instead? white and red? So, what would you recommend instead of a squeeze page? Apparantly, you think that visitors don't like it.
Sorry, but you did ask. Yes, some do like yellow and green, but they are far and inbetween. You want colors that are the most popular, that add a certan elegance and quality to your site. The most popular colors: Soft to medium dark red, like, B7, 2E, 00. Light gray, like what you have. But perhaps a bit darker, so the laptops can see it. Different unique shades of blue, like, AF, BB, CE and 6E,95,B4. And, teal. You may want to take out those boxes you have at the top. It makes the site look cheap. You are asking them to sign up for your free video, and you haven't even pitched to them yet. Put it at the end. Consider turning your site into an article that is filled with facts, free tips, and other sources they can read. Put your link to your free video in within the article also, and have it at the end of your page one more time. And have your video play, right then and there while they are still on that page. You have: "There Are Some Smart Guys Who Are Already Doing This..." Well, tell them right there. THEN at the end ask them to sign up for more free tips, and other eye-catching info they may want to read. Show and try to sell to EVERYONE, not less than the 10% who will sign up. And of those who do sign up, many won't open their e-mail account until later on, but by that time many of them will have lost the interest. You have to get them while they are there on your site. Put in nice pictures. The text is pushed to the left of your site. It doesn't look good. Perhaps also consider making the font size one size bigger. There are many who are tired, or it is hard for them to read text that small. I use Georgia, 12. It's a pretty good font, and at the right size. Not too small, and not too big.
Design wise I'd have to agree with Perry Rose. Especially the diagonal stripes, they should go asap. From a consumer point of view, I feel skeptical about your site. Interested, but skeptical. First, you say it's easy, but you don't really elaborate. If it's easy, why not just tell me what it is. Perhaps a better idea would to be tell them what to expect, and try to get them to submit their info for a detailed video walk-through. The highlighting is kind of weird. The first highlight, within the green box, is really unnecessary. You can just change the color of the font (to blue or red, maybe white even) or something, but the text is already big and visible enough already. The second highlight is just pointless. There's a block of black text on white background with a single thing standing out and "hydrogen fuel system is possible" is not the best thing that can stand out here. You may try to use more action words. I think "Easily convert your car to use water as fuel today!" is better than "How To Use Water As Fuel In Your Car." You can also put up a list of benefits on the right side bar. 1) Avoid paying high gas prices. 2) Easy to do 3) etc etc. Lists are much easier to follow and people actually pay attention to them. I didn't read the entire bottom block of text, and I don't think I ever will, though I did read the pointless highlight. Another thing, the respect privacy is good. Maybe put up a privacy policy page and put a pop up link. It's more work but will make it seem more legitimate. People don't read them anyway so you don't have to do a good job. Another thing, provide some pictures and examples. e.g. mr. jonathan smith converted his car to a hydrogen using vehicle and got 300 miles per gallon, that's 10 times more than what you can expect with traditional etc etc.
Ahhh my eyes.... Take down those colors. At least the ones that your headings are in. The opt in part of the site looks good. However I think that the rest of your copy is way to small. Changing these two things will at least give your copy a chance to be read.