Need copy feedback for new home page

Discussion in 'Copywriting' started by malice95, Jul 22, 2008.

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  1. #1
    I am doing a redesign on my site currently.. everything is in the
    works right now but the copy of the home page is basically
    finished.

    Could ya'll provide me some feedback on it? I sell one product,
    a tv screen protector.

    Content, language, conversion potential, etc.. any feedback is
    good feedback.

    This file is a horrible mock up in msword so ignore the colors and
    design. Focus on the words. There will be a menu bar/logo etc.. just
    not show in this pdf.

    http://www.tv-armor.com/homepage3.pdf

    Thanks,
    Mike
     
    malice95, Jul 22, 2008 IP
  2. TMG Enterprises

    TMG Enterprises Well-Known Member

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    For some reason, your pdf will not open for me. I tried left-click to just open it and got the message that IE could not open the site. I tried right-click-save as and that didn't work either.

    Sorry I couldn't help.

    Tina G
     
    TMG Enterprises, Jul 22, 2008 IP
  3. Live2Write

    Live2Write Active Member

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    "HTTP 404 Not Found" is the message I got! malice95 maybe you need to make sure that the doc opens to get any feedback from people around here. Good luck!
     
    Live2Write, Jul 22, 2008 IP
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    getting a 404 but your homepage looks nice!
     
    digitalballer, Jul 28, 2008 IP
  5. webgal

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    Cannot see it.
     
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    Page not Found. Please post again the link.
     
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    "HTTP 404 Not Found", post the link again.
     
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    It's a 404 error page meaning that file is not on the server or malice95 posted a wrong link to the file.

    Webgal and TMG Enterprises are probably using IE 7/8 (Beta) or Firefox, browsers that prevent type of error being displayed.
     
    Trusted Writer, Aug 3, 2008 IP