Need check my grammar

Discussion in 'Copywriting' started by indoforum, Nov 17, 2010.

  1. #1
    Here's my article. Please tell me which bad or wrong grammar.
    Thanks.

    If you’re wondering what to do with the pile of books around the house, you can transfer or sell for a friend of the students who have a limited budget and are looking for sell used textbooks. So, to help students in their small, while earning the same time. Students want to sell used textbooks can be brought back after college. It is a good way to keep your money on these expensive books that you get used to it now in perfect condition. Once you want to sell used textbooks, the movement has used books that students today are very grateful. The next step is how to go about their sales. The obvious answer is to a library near you and request information on procedures for the acceptance of sell used textbooks, contact. There are probably elements of their savings in stores that meet the reading.

    If a library is a valuable material, likely to be included in the list and you will receive in the amount of them. Which are much better those we all books that they will take place? You can also use a flea market where you see your neighborhood as a potential market, where there a number of books students may find useful are. The sell used textbooks are much cheaper than the recently published; you can sell used textbooks as supplementary reading to back up their studies to make. Be creative enough, you will enjoy clearing the shelves, while “benefit” of pleasure. Besides the sale of used textbooks in the old way, you can now auction their eBooks. The Internet is a good place to put your books on the market, with the presence of the online marketplace and change community sites online. These sites cover virtually all trade will be on sale to reflect. Book sale on the Internet was an old practice, and many are in this online trading business involved.
     
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  2. indoforum

    indoforum Active Member

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    Hi all, I want to pay $1 if you can help me.
     
    indoforum, Nov 17, 2010 IP
  3. vndnbrgj

    vndnbrgj Member

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    I hate to be the bearer of bad news. But I don't think $1 is going to fix it.
    I live in the US and speak, read, write English fluently.
    I can barely make out you are trying to say.
    I stopped reading after the first couple of sentences.
     
    vndnbrgj, Nov 17, 2010 IP
  4. sikatangpinoy

    sikatangpinoy Peon

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    My advice is to hire article editor of yours or even a writer that will surely give a great help
     
    sikatangpinoy, Nov 17, 2010 IP
  5. indoforum

    indoforum Active Member

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    Guys, that is not my writing, but written by my article writer.
    I just want to know my article writer quality.
     
    indoforum, Nov 17, 2010 IP
  6. contentboss

    contentboss Peon

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    It's gibberish. Looks like he used 'the bestestspinnzer' on it.
     
    contentboss, Nov 18, 2010 IP
  7. YMC

    YMC Well-Known Member

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    Another fine example of you get what you pay for.
     
    YMC, Nov 18, 2010 IP
  8. Abu Dhabi

    Abu Dhabi Greenhorn

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    And once again, copy is seen as a worthless after-thought. $1? Please.
     
    Abu Dhabi, Nov 18, 2010 IP
  9. indoforum

    indoforum Active Member

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    @YMC.
    @Abu Dhabi
    Its not about how much I pay. But its about quality of article writer.
    In this forum we can share anything for free, likewise checking my articles grammar.
    If you mind to help me without cost, that's no problem.
     
    indoforum, Nov 18, 2010 IP
  10. Perry Rose

    Perry Rose Peon

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    #10
    It looks like it was spun from a worthless spinner, which is a good example to see why they are indeed worthless.

    It was, wasn't it?

    Since your English is not that good, showing you the edited, correctly-written version wouldn't help you, because you can't even tell if this version is good or not.

    Take English classes.

    For good examples to go by, after you have gotten some grasp on our language (your teacher will tell you if you have or not), look at such articles on the subject you want to write about or to buy.

    Such as....

    http://www.google.com/#hl=en&expIds...=&aql=&oq=&gs_rfai=&pbx=1&fp=67408ac99299a041

    Get into affiliate marketing, if you haven't already, and give part of your profit to a writer who knows how to write.

    And...stay away from idiots who use any kind of an article spinner.
     
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    Perry Rose, Nov 18, 2010 IP
  11. conferenceshopper

    conferenceshopper Peon

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    Nice try. Seems that you really make it right.
     
    conferenceshopper, Dec 1, 2010 IP
  12. GrantDraper

    GrantDraper Active Member

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    #12
    In short; that article is terrible, really bad quality. If I was taking a wild guess I'd assume it's a $2 per 500 words job, as it really does make no sense. If I opened that as someone else suggested, I'd stop reading after the first two lines and go and find an article that I actually understood.


    "If you’re wondering what to do with the pile of books around the house, you can transfer or sell for a friend of the students who have a limited budget and are looking for sell used textbooks. " What I think he/she might be trying to say is...but the article is that bad, I'm not really sure...

    If you are unsure what to do with text books that you no longer use, and could really do with the cash; selling them might be an option

    "So, to help students in their small, while earning the same time."

    This is where 100% of people will stop reading, and at the 2nd sentence? Not good! I would not even try to translate that as it is just a group of words, it can not be classed as a sentence.
     
    GrantDraper, Jan 14, 2011 IP
  13. GreenSmile

    GreenSmile Well-Known Member

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    #13
    Obviously generated out of an article spinning software...bad read.....
     
    GreenSmile, Jan 15, 2011 IP