Need basic copywright help

Hello,

I'm new to copywriting,

I created this blog: http://www.richsurvey.blogspot.com

Can you please dive me tips, and what do you think is is OK or not?

I don't need long copy, I need short.

 

I stopped reading after, "who else want to get...."

That has got to be the record for the fastest grammar error.

 

Ok you said you need short copy, but that is too short. It doesn't have enough copy to make the reader become interested.
Also there is something that doesn't sound right in the second line of the main copy.
You need to correct your punctuation, also.

If you need help with your English Pm me.

 

Can you suggest me good title?

 

the title is not bad. you need to correct your grammar mistakes.

 

what about the text?

 

grammar, grammar, and grammar....also, you need to do more with the actual copy., To me it looks like every other get rich quick site, nothing really intriguing that would make me want to sign up with this one over another. I wish you the best of luck in writing though!

 

copyright, copywrite (these have different meanings). NEVER copywright.

 

I made several changes.

What do you think now?

Can this sell, or not.(This is presell page)

 

I think you need to get someone who really knows how to write to help you!

 

I never laughed at a thread so hard in my life.

I think I hurt my spleen.

 

Well gartar,
What kind of help you want me to do? Let me tell you, the page is not informative at all; besides there are some grammatical mistakes.
Your possible viewer will not get enough information regarding what you really want to offer.
If you want more help, consider PM me.
Thanks.

 

And Perry Rose,
Please don't be so sarcastic. We are here to help each other.

 

The red hurts my eyeeeeessss!!!!!!!!!!!

 

Id be surprised if you made a single sale.
You could start by putting an 's' on the end of "want" but it really needs a complete re-write.

 

And this grammatical error almost made me pee.

Another of your posts that i came across earlier had a word I have never seen b4, "full-proof".........You may want to start using FOOLproof.

 

I've not read it yet because I'm laughing at your busted spleen, Perry. Quit distracting me from the task at hand.

 

"THE EASIEST AND FASTEST WAY"
IT can be good marketing trick but remember that nothing is easy and fast !

 

I understand what you are trying to do, but if you are trying to sell someone on the idea that they can make a ton of money doing what you are already doing then it might be a good idea to pay for some hosting. I'm not sure I would trust someone who promised me ten thousand dollars a month but had the Blogger blog bar at the top of his or her site (especially when most people know that that bar is put on to every site that is using Blogger's free hosting).

 

Please, re-write it. That should help a little. Also, recreate the whole web page. It seems very messy and unorganized.