Need advice/feedback on my web design agency website copy

Discussion in 'Copywriting' started by alexmos.com, Oct 9, 2008.

  1. #1
    Hi there

    I have recently founded a web design agency, and would highly appreciate your honest feedback on my website copy, I'm worried about overdoing / not doing enough... keep in mind I am not a native English speaker :)

    my website is http://www.websondesign.com/

    Can't wait to see what you're thinking :eek:
     
    alexmos.com, Oct 9, 2008 IP
  2. what

    what Active Member

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    #2
    There are a few typos:

    ideeas
    Romaina
    Who we are? <-- better if you say Who are we?
    none the less

    etc

    The "SERVICES" page also needs work.
     
    what, Oct 9, 2008 IP
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    lightless Notable Member

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    #3
    Change the headline maybe.

    I can't identify with the word [at least currently]. If i am a customer, would i be looking for a professional WD&D company? Or would i be looking for someone affordable or experienced or whatever simple to understand and clear good quality that you have.

    Who would you choose?

     
    lightless, Oct 10, 2008 IP
  4. alexmos.com

    alexmos.com Member

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    @lightless - you have a point there... you made me thinking ;)

    How much would cost to have someone re-write my opening? Opening question and following paragraph? What's an average price for that?
     
    alexmos.com, Oct 11, 2008 IP
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    lightless Notable Member

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    #5
    Why not do it yourself. Here's a quick one. At least it will give you some ideas. Here I have focused on affordability. You can emphasize whatever quality you want though.

     
    lightless, Oct 11, 2008 IP
  6. alexmos.com

    alexmos.com Member

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    WOW... that's nice... right on the spot... everyone want's to make more money and save more money... let me know if some other great idea comes to your mind... :)
     
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    What do you think about the following version?

     
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    lightless Notable Member

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    With some minor changes, yeah. ;)

     
    lightless, Oct 11, 2008 IP
  9. alexmos.com

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    I was also thinking to change the "Ridiculously affordable prices" to "You got to love our prices" :)
     
    alexmos.com, Oct 12, 2008 IP
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    Amer-Nejma Banned

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    #10
    i cant see that :s
     
    Amer-Nejma, Oct 12, 2008 IP
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    lightless Notable Member

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    #11
    You could try these or something like these as well

    "You will love our prices, guaranteed!"
    "If you find our quality at better prices, feel lucky"
    "We are more interested in making clients than in making money"
    "Don't choose us merely on our pricing, also take a look at our portfolio!"
     
    lightless, Oct 12, 2008 IP
  12. alexmos.com

    alexmos.com Member

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    Haha... very funny
     
    alexmos.com, Oct 14, 2008 IP
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    Amer-Nejma Banned

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    lmao.im funny ??..:p
     
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    #14
    My thoughts:

    1. The splash page - 'Can't find a really professional web design and development company?' People would ask, yes and so what? It would help if you state explicitly that your company is what they're looking for.

    2. The front page - it would be good if you tell people outright what your site or company is all about. Don't wait for them to click on the About page.

    3. About page - '...all around USA, Canada, Europe, and more.' You can simplify this to just 'around the world' or 'all of our clients.'

    Hope that helps. :)

    - Cedric
     
    cd928, Oct 14, 2008 IP
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    #15
    I think that on your homepage, it would be better if you would just state the price as it is and not include this: "(US dollars)." I found it distracting and when people see something like $800, they would automatically assume that the price is in US dollars unless otherwise specified (e.g. AU$800).

    Also, it would be more professional-looking if you would capitalize proper nouns such as Google, Yahoo, and such on your Services page. Good luck on your site! :)
     
    le1la, Oct 22, 2008 IP
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    #16
    I think the main issue here is tha language. Get a good writer to do the writing for you. The design looks good and clean. It's a language mainly.
     
    MobileFun4U, Oct 22, 2008 IP
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    #17
    I can see that you have implemented all the comments below. From my point of view, it looks good now.

    All the best to your site.

    Cheers.
     
    gettingthere, Oct 24, 2008 IP