My Sales Copy

Discussion in 'General Marketing' started by redstar504, Aug 2, 2008.

  1. #1
    Hi,
    I'm looking for some input on a sales copy I wrote up.

    http://diets.myxboxbroke.com

    I'm fairly new to marketing, so any helpful comments are welcomed

    I'm wondering if I should add more stuff to the site such as an opt-in email form, some site articles, etc...

    Thanks,
    Redstar
     
    redstar504, Aug 2, 2008 IP
  2. Yousif

    Yousif Banned

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    Clean layout, the content is short and to the point, and you've also added a tool the user can interact with, looks nice. Good work. Also, I think since you're targeting both female and male persons, you should include a hot chick in that picture ;]
     
    Yousif, Aug 2, 2008 IP
  3. Profit Blade

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    It's little hard to read the content.
    Indent (space at the edge) may solve the problem.
    Also, I suggest you to make headline the first thing people read. That makes huge difference in if visitors leave instantly or read the content.
     
    Profit Blade, Aug 3, 2008 IP