My First Publicised Shot at Creative Writing

Discussion in 'Reviews' started by ThisIsOli, Sep 19, 2008.

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    For a while now I have written the beginnings of several stories, none of which I have ever really thrown myself into. The latest one however I am determined to continue!

    God Complex

    My main aim is to take God and see what he would think if he were humanized slightly and put under the psychiatrist spotlight, what would he say, what would he think, and why does a being that can see the birth and death of an atom or a galaxy find humanity so intriguing?

    So far I have only really begun to start it, and the last couple of the chapters are, honestly, terrible, but I would like to hear what people think of the story , the ideas and more importantly how it is being portrayed!!

    Thanks

    Oli
     
    ThisIsOli, Sep 19, 2008 IP
  2. lycos

    lycos Well-Known Member

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    Hi, I was reading the first blog post and although I didn't actually managed to finish it, I thought I would just pen down my view here. When I first started reading, it actually caught my attention and arouse my interest to go on further. However, towards some part, I actually got confused a little and lost my way. Eventually I didn't finish it because it actually came up too long and I have to scroll up and down to recap back what I have read. I hope you can accept this as constructive criticism because as I reader, somehow I expect simplicity and for me I prefer short but entertaining article.

    It is not lacking in terms of creativity but it just need the perfect touch to command readers' attention.
     
    lycos, Sep 19, 2008 IP
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    xdf Peon

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    nice writing skill! :)
     
    xdf, Sep 19, 2008 IP
  4. ThisIsOli

    ThisIsOli Active Member

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    Thanks! And don't worry about it lycos I would be grateful for anything that could improve it, structure is one of my huge problems so there is a good chance i need to organise the story a little better!
     
    ThisIsOli, Sep 20, 2008 IP