Made my first Squidoo Lens. It got to 96 overall! Tell me what you think.

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    Hi guys, I just made my first lense and it has exploded. I have been reading lenses for a very long time and I really enjoy squidoo.com, so I decided to make my first lense. I made a review of a Satellite TV for PC product I have bought and really like and use. I actually stand behind this product and wanted to make a page about it cause I love it!

    My point was to be honest and make a lense that had some uniqueness to it. The lense has done great and has really just exploded.

    But I know it can get better and as this is my first lense, I know there are things I have screwed up on.

    So if you would could you please do this for me. Really dive into my content and read it. If you're not interested in getting Satellite TV for your PC then act like you are when you read it. See if the page sells you, see if it makes you want to buy the product. If their is anything that turns you off on the page tell me about it. If there is anything that you would like to see on the page, tell me about it. If there is anything more you would need to know about the product then tell me about it.

    If you could, put yourself in the place of someone interested in this type of product and see if my page does a good job of making you want it.

    Any help is very much appreciated. I know it can be made better so I have come here for help. Thanks guy! Also if you could rate the page what you think it deserves and give it a comment that would be great!

    http://www.squidoo.com/satellite-tv-for-pc--

    Thanks,
    Ben
     
    p0ck3taces, Oct 29, 2008 IP
  2. lycos

    lycos Well-Known Member

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    If I'm a potential buyer, I'll find the info convincing and overall able to grab my attention. It seems that everything looks ok to me.
     
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    Ben,

    You have a great squidoo lens, Im sure everyone will found your lens interesting too. Keep up the good work :D
     
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    It seems very good! Nice design and GOOD content! Well done!
     
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    1st up its that I don't know why you din write Add-ons and wrote "Add ons"
    2nd up its the warning, you might be want to be more direct there, saying that 75% get scared because of the PayNOW button and then give the explanation and nothing more its needed
     
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    Ok cool, thank you much for spending your time to look over it for me.

    Thanks
     
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    Thanks for the comment and rate, I will be giving your squidoo page a visit ;)

    Thanks
     
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    p0ck3taces Active Member

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    Thanks for the encouraging words, I'm sure I will have more to come in the future.

    Thanks for spending your time on my page, greatly appreciated.

    Good, some criticism. I will change the add ons, good catch. So you think I should be shorter and more to the point on the warning? Note taken, will change it up a bit.

    Thanks all, any other comments or reviews are greatly appreciated.
     
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    Great lense. I like your sense of humor. Good use of graphics. No wonder it has been successful.
     
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    ;), cool thank you much for the reply.

    The sense of humor, did you get that overall from my writing or was it a couple particular lines?
     
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    Well done!

    However, I commend you most for studying Squidoo before you jumped in head first. Great lenses are designed well and have compelling content, yours included :)

    I hope you continue to be successful on Squidoo!
     
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    great job benjamin.. new yet promising..
    guys pm me ur lenses and ill try checkin em out ;0 AND ILL PASS mine in return :) CHEERS
     
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    Good looking lens, I rated in well
     
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    p0ck3taces Active Member

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    Thanks for the comments :D. I'm trying to get this one back to the top 100 mark, but I will be coming out with more lenses in the future as well I think.
     
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    Yeah, nice job. And you're up to #8 now. #188 overall - that is fantastic. I gave you a nice comment and a 5-star.

    Care to take a look at mine and see if it's worthy of your comment?

    www.Squidoo.com/squidoo-bible
     
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    Hey that's a nice squidoo lens. I favorited/rated/commented and lensrolled that. Is squidoo bible . com your site as well or just a site your talking about in your lens?

    If anyone else has a lens, feel free to add it in. Rate our lenses and we shall rate yours.
     
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