This is a new site launch for myself and business partner. We've been working really hard on getting everything together for it, and I just have that feeling that something is missing or forgotten - particularly on the homepage. Let me know your thoughts and ideas. http://easywahmwebsites.com
Design looks ok. The wording on the home page could use some attention. For example: "We have your top notch domain, design, and content started." This doesn't make sense to me . Also: "The cool thing is you will be able to update immediately" You should remove the word "cool" it sounds unprofessional and your target audience is not teenagers.
You seem to really emphasize WHAM - but WHAM says nothing to me and means nothing to me. When you say at the top "we make being a wham easy" I say so what. I think that when a visitor hits your site it has to be easy to identify what the site is. That is without having to read the fine print below on the page. It needs to deliver a clearer message that is immediately understood.
Exactly, I don't even know what that means. The design itself is quite clean but you are not getting the message across clearly, work on the content.
I like your idea and think there is a market for it. I would have to agree that your content and wording needs some attention. Like this: "You can also create content sites with only pages and shopping carts can be integrated quickly." This does not make sense. It is critical to make sure that your wording is professional with no spelling or grammatical errors. Scott
So why not be specific on what your 'wham' site has to do and offer. Best of luck! The look of your site is OK.
Thank you for all the advice and thoughts! I'll be working on the copy of the weekend. I really appreciate everyone's input.
I made some wording changes on the homepage this afternoon, I hope it looks better and flows better. Thanks for being our extra eyes. It's been really helpful. Also still open to any suggestions, and please let me know if you see any errors that I may have missed.