gotcha, thanks. i did shrink the text as suggested. i should have hired someone but i wanted to try to do the entire thing myself. honestly, im not a fan of what most squeeze pages look like however i know they WORK and that is why people do them that way.
I agree with the others. Try making your site look more professional. The template is okay, but I would add more spacing between blocks of text. Also, you don't need to use too many colors. Plain old black is okay. You can also make the font sizes uniform. Just bold or underline the important parts. There are some grammatical errors that need to be corrected. Anyway, congratulations on making your first sales. Your site still needs some work but you can definitely make it better.
alright! short of taking on a specific template (yet) i have taken a bit of everyone's advice. I have added buying buttons and removed the 80% of the color. I have also moved all the font way down. how about the over all idea?? I just want to make sure the idea or gist is clear enough. Is it enough to make it sound interesting?
Better...but still not good. You are missing a lot of important points in your page, like testimonials, maybe some videos, nicely organized bordered text not just centered. The Welcome on the top looks stupid as well, you do not have any credibility factors like policy, terms...etc.
Ok, well i will into adding some more pictures. didnt think about policy or terms, i will look around for examples. hopefully the unique system will carry me a bit!
Not sure what the site looked like from the beginning, but it still needs a little tweaking in my opinion One glaring thing that's stuck out right away are the THREE "BUY NOW" buttons...the consumer is fully aware that you're trying to sell them something. Maybe making them a little smaller or limiting it to one place at the bottom? (Unless you plan on adding a lot of content?) If they're truly interested, they'll find the button to purchase your product. ...just my two cents. Best of luck!