Landing Page

Discussion in 'Reviews' started by JyeP, Nov 24, 2012.

  1. #1
    Hi Guys,

    A review on my landing page would be great. I didn't want anything to big and in depth, just something simple and too the point. It's a premium theme with a few changes.

    http://improvedblogging.com/

    Cheers.
     
    Last edited: Nov 24, 2012
    JyeP, Nov 24, 2012 IP
  2. eakins103

    eakins103 Active Member

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    It looks pretty good. You would've caught my sale.
     
    eakins103, Nov 24, 2012 IP
  3. JyeP

    JyeP Active Member

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    Thanks for the comment Blckbrd.
     
    JyeP, Nov 25, 2012 IP
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    stacy1 Greenhorn

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    My suggestion is that Content is not enough
     
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    malkram Greenhorn

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    landing page is very well structured, I'm sure it'll make your visitors want to buy your advice
     
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  6. JyeP

    JyeP Active Member

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    Thanks Guys

    Like I mentioned, wanted it to be to the point and now overly saturated.
     
    JyeP, Nov 26, 2012 IP
  7. seph2013

    seph2013 Peon

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    Not that great.

    Make your banner bigger with testimonials and high quality. Get a sign up sheet or fill out form up there as your call to action. Use the word FREE on there as well. Get your number and contact info right on the landing page as well.
     
    seph2013, Nov 26, 2012 IP
  8. sailog

    sailog Greenhorn

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    It looks awesome, but that's personal opinion as I don't really a fan of overcrowded sparking websites :)
     
    sailog, Nov 27, 2012 IP
  9. Cheeth

    Cheeth Greenhorn

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    Its very symmetrical, could be good or bad. Mix it up a little sometimes symmetrical can be more boring.

    Also include payment methods (images)

    Its not immediately clear - on a quick speed read, is this an ebook?

    Looks like the logo is mirrored, you are wasting space in the banner box

    Why are you an authority to listen to, do you run a successful blog, do you know successful Bloggers? make this clear

    Maybe a picture of human being on there would be nice, some happy with complete piece of mind after reading you ebook would do the trick

    things like - More Time - Learn about the 24 hour rule, and why you should be using it.
    try to be more specific, like
    [FONT=Helvetica, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif]Learn about the 24 hour rule, how you can shave off 50% of time spent managing your blog

    I hope this helps, I don't mean to be hard hitting I'm just trying to help
    [/FONT]
     
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  10. Cheeth

    Cheeth Greenhorn

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    I agree with also, more details will be needed to make sales
     
    Cheeth, Nov 28, 2012 IP
  11. TIEro

    TIEro Active Member

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    Off the top of my head:

    - Kinda bland, though "clean" can be a good look. The logo space is bizarre - either put one of those fake book images there or just use a logo header (as you already are). A massive space like that with a small logo in the middle is wasteful.

    - The text reads like you don't have any clear reasons why anyone NEEDS your ebook. Sure, it's got some stuff in it but it comes across more as something to spend $5 on if you've got nothing better to do than an absolute essential.

    - You say it's a short book but you don't say how many pages. This makes cynical people like me think it's a 5-page piece of crap thrown together in 10 minutes rather than something worthwhile. (No offense, seen too many of those!)

    - Vague promises. I know that's how marketing works (promise nothing, take money, thank you very much) but there's no oomph. In detail:

    - "Manage your articles" - why? What do you mean? Who cares?
    - "Power your SEO" - only ONE lesson? Kinda sucky.
    - "More time" - not bad, has that "ooh, what's that about?" angle. Would be better with "The 24 Hour Rule" as the title and something whizzy as the text (like Cheeth's "Spend 50% less time managing your blog!").
    - "Reader satisfaction" - seriously, most people you're trying to sell to either don't know what that is or don't give a crap. Go for something that suggests financial or reputation benefits like retaining readers, getting people to keep coming back, etc.

    - You say the download will be available right after paying. That's a bad expression as it suggests getting their money is more important to you than giving them instant access: rephrase it so it emphasises no waiting, instant gratification, etc.

    - The payment system looks bad. I know it's a simple PayPal thing but there's no meat to it: my first thought would be "Hang on, this is a direct payment... how do I know I'll get anything?" I'd suggest a payment box rather than a button, in which you can state that their purchase is covered by PayPal's guarantees, that the ebook will be instantly available, include an email for customer service, etc. Reassure them.

    - Agree with the testimonials. Even if you have none, contact some people who run blogs (big or not) and ask them to review it. Give them a free copy in exchange for usable text. Sharon Hurley Hall would probably do it, or Spike Wyatt. Or Samar Owais. Maybe even Anne Wayman. They're all in that "reasonably successful" bracket (as writers and bloggers) where their opinion has some weight without having to get down on your knees and beg Darren Rowse to nod in your direction. :)

    Personally, I wouldn't buy it. No offense. There's just no driving reason to buy: it sounds wishy-washy and when you can get entire 100+-page ebooks on similar subjects for around the same price, well... why would I?
     
    TIEro, Nov 28, 2012 IP
  12. sarahk

    sarahk iTamer Staff

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    #12
    A bit of proofing wouldn't hurt
    but I really liked the layout and that you've gone away from the overused and abused style that has been around for so long. By taking a simpler approach you look more confident and authoritative.

    I'd like to see more active language on the "Manage your articles" bullet point and I'd like to be able to click through to a page telling me about the authors and why I should follow their advice.
     
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    I visited the page. The page looks nice, organize and beautiful.

    I want you to work on a readable (quality) content.
    Make some SEO for the backlinks.
     
    Nawshale, Dec 12, 2012 IP