I am currently promoting "Top Secret Fat Loss Secret" and here is 1 of my landing pages. http://www.miscellaneousinformation.com/fat_loss_secret.html i changed it very little from the original copy in their affiliate section. I need suggestions to improve it.... my conversion for this landing page is low... all suggestion to improve the conversion are appreciated.
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This looks too plain in my view. You need some form to what you are doing. Plus the title at the top is confusing "Why All Doctors Want This Lady Doctor Dead?"
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Maybe two columns/tables with text on left and graphics on the right. Will this be just a one-page site? If you'll have more pages, perhaps a navigational menu down the left-hand table. It's hard to keep the attention of the reader with so much text. If the font was larger and darker. It looks like it has a "sales letter" theme, so perhaps you could build more on that. How about some "before and after" pictures of those that have lost weight? I see most weight-loss sites do that. I'm not expert, I'm just reviewing from the point of someone who would come to the page to buy be educated on this new method.