www.productiveplr.com/ProductivePLRcopy.html just want your thoughts. I like copy to be brief and to the point, but exciting... let me know if i've accomplished this please.
sorry to say, but it does not really grab me maybe you can use some boxes or colors. the information is there, but you might work a little bit on the presentation
Its too plain for my liking. I wouldnt be shelling out money to a website that looks like its been made in 1 minute..
I couldn't click the back button quick enough. That looks like what I refer to as the internet version of a Television infomercial. Needless to say, I find both revolting.
Some comments: 1. The idea of what you want to deliver to your customers is already there, it's just that you could still make it more centered towards them. Like the sentence, "PLR should be an investment and a time saving tool." You can rewrite it in a way that your potential customers would be able to relate to it. 2. "I like copy to be brief and to the point, but exciting." The copy suffers from being too brief. Keep in mind that more than making your copy exciting or deciding on how long the copy should be, it's primary purpose is to help sell the product. People won't buy the product if they don't have enough information about it (due to the very short copy), and if they don't know what's in it for them (e.g. would it help them save money?). I hope that helps.
Yes weather simple sprucing or going all out, it would look better in a table format. It is hard to read due to the structure of the article.
I have never been a fan of the long sales letter sites and applaud your attempt at keeping your pitch short. That said, it looks like you compromised clarity and sentence structure to keep things short. I had hoped to provide you with some constructive criticism that you could actually use. But, there is just so much going wrong here. Think about some of what you are saying... "Unique Content Available HERE Only!" This statement is not even remotely true and has a construction that is common among people for whom English is not their first language. A more realistic claim would be "All of our PLR packages are unique." "Private Label Rights is the most impressive source of research, and product development available." Private label rights are...not is PLR packages are... PLR content is... Beyond the construction, I suspect many would share my view that PLR content is very rarely impressive. There are a few excellent writers providing PLR content but their work is hard to find among the volumes of mindless dribble. Again, you are generalizing and not actually talking about your product. Did you mean to say Productive PLR is the most...? You have failed to explain what twice the research, twice the content means and what that means to a potential customer.
I think you are successful in getting your base message across- but only to those who read the whole page. Here are my turn offs: 1. Random capitalization In Your copy. Maybe another copywriter will happily point out why I'm wrong but...random capitalized words cause an emotional disconnect for me. When I see them, I feel like we are no longer equals. I don't respect you anymore and I see you as a used car salesman with a fake smile. 2. "You must be tired" this line makes me feel defensive. Had you written, "Are you tired of purchasing blah blah?" I would have taken a moment to consider and thought, "Yeah, yeah I am tired!" Even, "If you're tired" would work. 3. Too many exclamation points. It creates a false sense of urgency. You can create urgency and a call to action with your words- you don't have to use exclamation points so often. I think the length is fine, it just needs to be more compelling and dynamic.
You want me to part with my hard-earned money and that's all you're giving me? That's what I thought when I got to the end of your copy. It's too short and the formatting could be a lot better.
I was going to tell you to format it correctly, but that wouldn't be enough. Your opening line should be something positive along the lines of; Congrats! You have just found the Best PLR articles online. Use bullet points They Look Pretty Notice best plr articles? That may be something people do a google search for. It may also be the title that you want to use for the page.
Thank you very much for those who actually contributed ideas and suggestions. I've been writing for many years, but copy is new to me. I'm going to work it tonight and I'll come back for some more info... you're all wonderful!