just re-desgin my landing page, what do you think?

Hello everybody!

I just re-designed my landing page, just wanted to know what you guys think.

I have been getting traffic to this website (50/70 UV/day) but no conversions, so I dicided to re-design.

he is the url: how to write a cv

any suggestion would be highly apreciated

thank you

 

I think you should list more steps with pictures to write a good and impressed CV on your page, but skip some important steps.

 

I think you have to improve more and more

 

thanks for a reply

that was the way I have first (before I re-designed) and it did not work out.

I think if you put the "perfect" cv pictures then you are almost giving away all the information for free.

any other suggestions

thank you

 

thanks for the reply, but can be a little more specific pls.

 

it is simple and pretty good, there is only one thing you should do; add more two guides as your second and third recommendations...

 

When I read it, I don't get the 'flow' that I should when reading an advertisement for a product. The sentences don't flow right. I'm not sure how else to describe it though. Make everything roll off the tongue you know?

Take this original:

"C.V. or curriculum vitae is the most important document for getting a job, without a good CV it is very difficult to get the perfect career that you are looking for, specially if you have no qualifications or experience."

This is how I would say it:

"CV, or curriculum vitae, is the most important document for landing a job. Without a good CV it's extremely difficult to get that perfect career you've been searching for, especially if you don't have the qualifications and/or experience."

Sound better? Ye or ne?

 

I took your advice and added 1 more products
so now I have 2 products, what do you think?

 

it does sound much better!
thank you!

any more suggestions

 

I don't necessarily want to re-write your entire page, but try to apply the same flow that I did on that phrase. Remember, you can give a man a fish and he has food for a day. Teach him how to fish, and he has food for life.

 

well said!

thank you

 

A suggestion, why don't you put in the landing page a c.v. model? So the customers can get an idea of how it would look like. Maybe not a complete c.v. but a small preview instead?
Good Day

 

thanks for a reply. as I said earlier that was the way it was (before I re-designed)

but it did not convert, it seams to like giving away information for free

any other suggestions

 

Can we take a peek at the re-designeg landing page?

 

Good, could you add the third one..