Is this how a landing page should look like?

I'm a newbie just started promoting cb products. Its been like 2 weeks now but still no sale. I wont worry much about that because I just started my article marketing campaign, however i don't have any idea what a good landing page should have and look like. Can you guy's take a look at my LP and give some suggestion. Please tell me if there are room to improve. Thanks.

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I think that's a pretty damn good one.

-Jay

 

I agree. It's pretty good. They land there and you give them reasons to click through.

 

Thanks for the review.. any improvement that i have to make?

 

If this is your first landing page, you did a awesome job. Now promote it the right way and you'll be laughing all the way to the bank.

 

That's a very good presale landing page. I almost clicked through

 

I really like your landing page excellent work!

 

I like it , simple, coherent and straight to the point landing page!
Good job! Hope you'll have luck selling it!

 

Thanks for the encouragement everyone.. glad it's turn out ok. Now i will try to promote it.

 

good job, Well done

 

Yeah, nice landing page. Looks clean.

 

Nice landing page,That's enough

 

Your landing page looks great...

 

It's definitely pretty good for your first try. However, I think you still could make some improvements. For one, I would ditch the product image on the left. Your goal should be to focus on the problem first. I would get rid of any mention of the product till later.

For instance, don't mention the product before the bullets. Instead of "With Chest Coach you will learn", try "Let me show you:"

The goal of your landing page should be to give the impression that you can help them then and there with their problem. You do this by giving your landing page an advertorial feel to it. Then after you have them salivating with everything you're about to show them, you then introduce them to the product that will solve all their problems.

Also, get rid of your grammar mistakes. They lose your site's credibility. For example: "you will never will.", "Some of the system doesn’t even work".

 

nuruddeen710 , good job on the landing page. What did you use to create the landing page, did you base it off a template or started from scratch?

If it's not converting for you it might be the product/niche you decided on.

 

Nice job on it! What did you use to build it?

 

Is there pre made landing pages where all I have to do is add text? I'm not a great designer.

 

Nice job. Like what tpc asked, what did you use to build it?

All I can recommend is that instead of using guide.php to redirect to the sales page, maybe just make a directory called "guide" and put an index.php with the redirect code in it?

 

Nice Landing page.

 

Excellent landing page....