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Is my explanation of what I'm selling good?

can you give me your opinion.

 

You do a good job of explaining the product and you also do a good job of selling it.

However, I think the design of your site could really use some work. Your header is almost impossible to read and that red type in the dark green boxes burns my eyes.

I say clean up the design a but and you'll see better results from customers.

 

thanks I was so into the rest of the site I didn't realize how bad the design actually was. All the people on this forum seem to thing the design needs work so that what I'm going next is fixing the whole site up. thanks for you comments

 

I agree with this. Yeah! Hurts my eyes, too. You could maintain the green color but add contrasts. Best of luck!

 

I'm revamping my whole template, you won't even recognize it next time.

Maybe a professional looking site with well optimized content and attractive Layout can beat those other crappy "pixel script" sites.

 

yes i agee with the guys, think it needs a major retouch.

 

Little too much green for my taste, how about adding some white? Your pitch sounds good though.

 

good sales pitch but i agree also the design is a lil off..