infomercials on steroids

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    Ankur Sharma, Jun 10, 2008 IP
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    bbrian017 Well-Known Member

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    First one was pretty good, and the second was pretty good as well. I would suggest keeping the text or font in the second one a little more consistent and one set of wording is weird in the first.

    "Ranging from the 2 - 10 dollar range"

    I don't think you need to say range twice...

    say this,

    "With stocks ranging from 2 - 10 dollars"
     
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    Ankur Sharma Peon

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    Oops , thanks for pointing that mistake. I appreciate your opinion .
     
    Ankur Sharma, Jun 10, 2008 IP
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    ahkip Prominent Member

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    i feel sick watching the first video, the text move too fast and didn't stay long enough

    color of the second video make it really hard to read, also there are too much distraction IMO
     
    ahkip, Jun 10, 2008 IP
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    good job. I think you did a good job. Be sure to check your spelling so that it looks more professional. At the end of the second one you said "rite away" instead of "right away".
     
    imjacob, Jun 10, 2008 IP